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11/30/25, 12:58 AM
Although I understand why the author had to abandon this) then the story would have been very long and new plot lines would have opened up that would have had to be developed. But otherwise, itโ€™s a good sexual story of hypnosis!
11/30/25, 12:56 AM
Great story, but the ending is disappointing because it doesn't answer many questions). 1. How did Aaron and Greg get caught if they knew that Jay hypnotizes people? Are they stupid? (They should have known about his methods) Even if they wanted to use Dak for themselves (for evil) they should have warned their families or Dak's family what Jay did to him (just in case something happens to them)! But I liked everything) but Jay as a character is not revealed at all) The story has an open ending, many questions are not answered (Dak's family should have suspected that something is wrong with him) Moreover, a person doesn't just go from Pilots to flight attendants! (This is if the Admiral asked to become an ordinary private) Yes, for the story it's cool and sexy, but it doesn't make sense for reality) and, on the contrary, it harms Jay himself in the future, since loved ones can investigate and find out his rank or later by hiring a Detective or Psychologist! If you ignore these plot holes, the story itself is written 8/10, the writing quality and erotic part are excellent)
11/30/25, 12:26 AM
Wow you've attracted a few interesting comments. I enjoyed the story. It was short, snappy, and I don't mind a little cruel twist of fate. I write stories with similar themes and believe me, I find it difficult to toe the line between between being too cruel or too light. My personal feedback would be that I'd have loved more details on Derek actually losing his boyfriend. That would be crushing to see your loving partner turn on you just like that. But other than that, it was a fun and hot read! This style of writing won't be everyone's thing, but I feel there is still a place for it.
Anonymous
11/29/25, 11:21 AM
Really sad and disappointing, hope I can read something better from you in the future

11/29/25, 9:59 PM
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11/29/25, 8:57 PM
I hope Sergeant Brooks is not an antagonist of the story. He could also build his own harem like Zeke and March. Maybe they could join forces. Also, Zekes storyline iz very exciting. He better get onto Oby so he could be atleast resistan to it. His bois need to safely oby him or else. Cant wait for the next chapter.
11/29/25, 8:51 PM
Absolutely amazing work!!!!
11/28/25, 10:37 AM
Oh, sure! Just what I wanted to wake up to; the gut-punch chapter! XD Yes, yes, I know things are darkest before the dawn and all that,... Still adore this story and the characters! Glad to see this chapter up :3 Thank you!

11/28/25, 7:05 PM
@[Blazargus](/user/show/10012784) Haha the real Gut punch hadnt even happened yet.

11/29/25, 8:01 PM
@[thejazzcat](/user/show/10005285) You make things WORSE? damn.
11/29/25, 7:56 PM
Would like to read more. Maybe about a male pregnancy with the slime spreading like a virusโ€ฆ..or something like that.
Nov 27, 2025
11/29/25, 7:41 PM
Mmmmm, gonna need seconds of this. And thirds and fourths!!! Oh hell! Big pig out!!! ๐Ÿ˜‹๐Ÿ˜‹๐Ÿ˜‹
Allen
11/29/25, 6:34 PM
Good story made me hard !!!