Recent Comments

7/11/25, 5:27 AM
Wow! The horniest scene yet. Great writing here, @NeonDemon. There's a lot to unpack and speculate about. First, if there was any expectation that Master was going to allow Jamie a truly free choice, you can forget about that. Master's M.O. is always to tilt the playing field in his favor, and he does it Masterfully here. Then there's the revelation about the origins of powers. Using dark matter and dark energy as the moving forces was a stroke of genius. It's NeonDemon's hyperdive. Another good one is the "half awakening." That presents a lot of options for Jamie's future. And that unseen second crack in Jamie's power dam? Where will that lead us? I suspect Mentat put it there, knowing the League is going to lose Jamie to Master, why not make him a time bomb that could seriously damage Myriad’s Network? It's not as if the League leadership cares if innocents get killed or injured when he goes off. To the contrary, it fits ever so nicely into their manipulations to keep the populace fearful and dependent on the League. But only NeonDemon knows for sure where it came from. Maybe he'll tell us before he's done. Anyway, this is a terrific job of leaving us in suspense and wanting more. You hear me, NeonDemon? I want more!

Anonymous
7/11/25, 9:12 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) 100%, there's no way that Mentat was unaware that Jamie's heroism was slowly corroded away. I mean, if I were Mentat, I'd do the same

7/12/25, 4:06 AM
@Anonymous My theory is that on his recent check up visit, Mentat clocked how thoroughly Master was embedding himself in Jamie's mind, and that he was pretty much a lost cause. So he created a time bomb with the mental power limiting dam by adding the new crack. It at least has the potential to strike a powerful blow against Myriad and his Network.
7/12/25, 1:20 AM
Excellent story, I hope you will someday publish your other stories on this site and they will be freely available) especially the story about Revenge and Secrets.
7/12/25, 12:53 AM
Yummy delicious thoughts. Can't help but like so live this story. Thank you for sharing
7/11/25, 11:58 PM
I realized that I have forgotten to leave a comment when the chapter was first released. In my defense, I was really high on orgasm so my mind wasn't in the right place (or maybe it was, considering that it happened again a few hours later....). Anyway, this was a wonderful addition, even better than the last one. In a way, I'm a bit sadden that both friends never planned on keeping their deal fair and square, but I am very happy with the end result! I hope to read more from you soon :D
7/11/25, 11:49 PM
_Whew_. I'll have to leave a longer comment later, but this was really fun and hot. Two homophobes getting 'punished' by being modded into the bodies (and desires) of gay himbo bottoms... Kudos in particular for the moment where Sergeant mods them into having a craving for cock but it doesn't _quite_ hit them, until Sergeant whips out his big dick—and then, the sight of it just overwhelms their brains and makes their new desires go haywire. Very effectively paced, lol
7/11/25, 9:05 PM
Horny and Suspenseful! Talk about getting fucked by your own suit. Even if Master is really guiding it all. What a hot scene. Jamie is truly a walking wet dream with those muscles in that tight suit! As I was reading it, I didn't think his conversion would be like this. Hidden in his bedroom. I was anticipating something grandeur. Then at the end it was clear this was just his preliminary. Yet what a cliffhanger. I doubt that the league initially intended to make him a trojan horse. That dam has clearly been there for a long while. But it seems that may happen with or without their interference. Most likely they wanted to shape him into a weapon once he was conditioned enough. Controlling the flow of his powers. The next chapter is going to be so exciting!!
GruffBear
7/11/25, 6:19 PM
Ok, yes, the sex scenes with the father are hot as shit. However, there's no buildup to this, and it is impossible to believe that in a matter of minutes the dad becomes a cock hungry whore. It would be much more believable if the dad went under more slowly, rather than just simply becoming a bitch. Build up is everything--it's hard to cum without it because it's just a huge missing component of the story. Now if the father was a robot with a whore switch then yes, there could be a sudden personality replacement. But people don't work that way, especially the most repressed or in denial. However, I wrote about 1000 words leading up to the full-blown sex with the dad, and that seems to get me to cum at the money shot. You are an incredibly talented writer, and I would much prefer you writing about a slower transformation than myself because I'm not a talented writer. No reason to disagree or agree with what I've written, but I can't continue reading these kinds of stories that venture so far from reality as to become totally unbelievable.
4/20/25, 7:51 PM
Next part coming soon!

7/11/25, 5:16 PM
@[Sam Wilson](/user/show/10048195) Still waiting. Hope the next part comes soon.
7/11/25, 5:10 PM
I'm waiting for the next chapter.
7/11/25, 5:01 PM
Looking forward to a continuation!