Recent Comments

1/9/24, 3:33 AM
A day late, but just wanted to take the time to commend you for writing an effortful first submission! The juxtaposition between Jace's stepfather and Coach was a nice contrast and I'm looking forward to seeing how Jace's relationships develop - particularly between Coach and Dane. I would heed Soren's advise about the separation of dialogue between paragraphs, as you did a masterful job writing it and it would be a shame if it got lost in the reading. Keep writing and I can't wait to see more!

1/12/24, 1:41 PM
@[Franco Apollo](/user/show/10029736) Thanks! I'm also most excited about developing these specific relationships, between Jace with Coach and his stepfather. Wanted for him to have a diferent dynamic with each other character, so they truly feel different and wanted to have both extremes. There's gonna be more exposition and worldbuilding in the next two chapters, so then it will be a bit more clear where each path is going. Stay tuned!
1/12/24, 2:21 AM
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Anonymous
1/12/24, 1:06 PM
@[Palladium](/user/show/10033545) Rewards! 😍
Hinner
1/11/24, 9:14 PM
ID 1191188 I really like all the new stuff, especially the labyrinth! The events and the guys are so hot! I just wish getting a mythical was a little bit easier and didn't require thousands of battles even when shards are plenty available...

Anonymous
1/12/24, 1:06 PM
@[Hinner](/user/show/10013948) Rewards! :heart_eyes:
1/12/24, 12:20 PM
I agree with felix.nox : the ending just confirmed the rest of the story. All chapters are unethical, not just the last. The bad guy won, yes. It doesn't mean the story is badly written or uninteresting or not exciting. I liked this story, it gave good material for masturbation, it was hot.
1/12/24, 11:56 AM
Super super hot!
1/12/24, 6:54 AM
It took me a while to get into the characters of this story. I'm not certain that I ever did, but the writing grew stronger with each chapter. For a first post, this is a great one. I'd like to read more from you, DomNerd. Thanks for an unexpected New Year's gift.
1/12/24, 1:23 AM
That was so good! I love the concept of that game. I just wish the game went on longer and involved more magic, personalities, professions, etc. I hope that's not the last we hear of Owen Howland!

1/12/24, 6:24 AM
@[Jockboy Joe](/user/show/910088) Hahaha you wish I had gone on longer; I kept trying to get to the end! I thought it would be a fun new years short story and it ended up pushing 10,000 words! That said, I’ve left it open for more Owen Howland shenanigans :wink:
Anonymous
1/11/24, 10:01 PM
Excited to read more of your stories. All of them have been wonderful so far.

1/12/24, 6:21 AM
@Anonymous Thank you!! There are many more to come!
1/12/24, 12:12 AM
This was absolutely amazing. Fantastic idea, fun magic, great characters. Thanks so much!

1/12/24, 4:52 AM
Thank you @[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) :) I can never decide if I like this one or not, but I'm certainly glad you did!

1/12/24, 4:56 AM
@[Derek Williams](/user/show/175661) It's so original and well-written, it's hard not to love!

1/12/24, 6:20 AM
:heartbeat:
1/11/24, 3:49 AM
Loooove games as a cause of transformations and mind changes, and this one did that reeeally well!! Nice story!!

1/12/24, 6:20 AM
@[klaraklao](/user/show/10000318) Thank you! I love that you love it! :slightly_smiling_face: