@[Kink Author](/user/show/10050299) Oooh I love this. Keep going, boy

@@TinyDSF from X heck yeah, thanks for reading ;)

@Stroppy Author Hello, thank you very much for commenting, all comments and constructive criticism are welcome and I appreciate them very much. First of all, it means a lot to me that you think it's well written. Being English my non-native language, I try very hard to do quality work for all of you, and I'm glad to know you think so. Oh, man, I’m surprised, I honestly didn't think the story was so dark and hopeless! I thought I'd managed to make clear Kyle’s guilty pleasure he’s experiencing, and that a big part of what's happening to him is so tortuous, because in some degree that he refuses to admit to himself, he's actually enjoying in part what's going on, and that he’s definitely having the best sex he ever had. That was my intention in chapter 12 with the meeting of the three Kyles: the conflict between his morality, his reality and his animal instincts. I'm sorry I have not been clear on that. This is my first story, so I totally accept that it may have flaws like that. And in fact some of what you’re saying (the enjoyment of the victims) appears better explores in chapter 14, which I’m already working on. But of course I take the criticism, and I respect your decision not to continue reading it. I will keep all of that in mind. Again, thanks a lot for the feedback, buddy!

@[Plymouth58](/user/show/1353762) It's a pity there is no continuation 😔 Is it possible to read this story somewhere? Do you publish it in your language anywhere?

@[Zander-1](/user/show/10015044) Hi! I'm so sorry I haven't been able to continue the story. It's incredible that so much time has passed; it's the biggest writer's block I've ever had. The worst part is, I know how the story goes, I know what I want to write, but I've reached the point where I'm bogged down in a major plot point, and I'm terribly stuck. I think being left to write alone without any extra support is what got me stuck. I must have written a dozen variations already, but it's really complicated because the story keeps going in the wrong direction. Believe me, I'm trying to get back on track, but oh, it's so difficult! The job change from employee to freelancer hasn't made things any easier either; I used to write on my way to work. I'm still working on the next chapterl, but I can't seem to develop talk between Terry and T-Bone properly. It's really the ending of the first act and the start of the second one, where things get terribly out of control for the heroes, so it had to be made well. I'm confident that by fixing that, I'll be able to continue.

@@Plymouth58 Forget the story, man. I'm just glad you're ok. I thought you were a late case of Covid. I hope you stay well.

@[Gcub4](/user/show/10000534) Clark is a rogue. Definitely showing these two how to LIVE!

@[Jonanator](/user/show/863971) You might be surprised. It may not be in the way either of them had originally intended. I have a second installment in the works.

@[Franco Apollo](/user/show/10029736) Thanks so much! I was worried about the multiple perspectives--this was my first major foray into multiple perspectives, and I'm glad it's working well. The Hunter arc is one of my favourites in this story, I hope it'll satisfy.

@[Reader](/user/show/780823) To me it seems like he was talking about Sam with whoever gave him the drugs and that sorta anchored him. Hey there big boy -> oh I'm not gay I'm just here with my BIL yadda yadda -> sounds like you should fuck your BIL -> he's great but I'm straight -> and then that's where all the everyone's fluid fuck who you want comes in. Lucky break.

@Rando Our sites explicitly allow raceplay as part of an erotic story. Not to endorse racism in any way, but because raceplay is an integral part of the kinky erotic culture. And as long as it's purely sexual and doesn't convey the message that all members of a given ethnicity are superior or inferior just because of their "race", those stories are fine to be posted here. It doesn't matter which "race" we're talking about. And the notion that white people are now the victims of racism, especially in the USA and other Western cultures, is a narrative that I personally find disgusting.

@[Corin](/user/show/125990) I'm happy to hear the "as long as it’s purely sexual and doesn’t convey the message that all members of a given ethnicity are superior or inferior just because of their “race”" statement. That's something I completely agree with. Nowhere in my message did I talk about the USA or other Western cultures, white people also live in eastern and southern cultures, be at as a minority group. Also, I personally find the notion that they can't be the victims of racism in those cultures disgusting. Especially if I see what is being posted about them on platforms like twitter/X and tumblr (which ironically come from the USA). They can experience racism just as anyone else can, and to deny someone a feeling is just rude in my eyes. Also adding a location restriction on it just feels weird to me. Stories were white people are mass transformed into people of different "races", where it as treated as if they were "upgraded", stories were a relation between a white man and a woman (where the man is seen as the problem) is up and a person of color ends up doing it with both, stories were all white men are mass enslaved to server men of color (slavery stories are always gross in my eyes), stories where they are called white-trash, bleach demons, milk crickets, q-tip people. And that's the tame stuff. I've also seen posts about destroying their cultures and killing white people, and you don't call that racism? I wouldn't like it when "my" people say this about others, but I also don't like it when it is said about "us". I've also seen those "maga" stories on Tumblr and I find those absolutely disgusting, as in my eyes they seem to be an insult to all people involved. Luckily, people are speaking up about those stories, although other problematic stories seem to fly under the radar. At the end of the day, I'm sick of being treated as I don't deserve to live or be happy, by people who don't even know me. I'm sick of getting accused of things I've never thought or said or where things I worked hard for are downplayed (which hurts extra as I feel like I have to put in extra effort to compensate for the problems my autism might cause others), while I haven't done that to anyone else. I also won't fall for the "but they didn't say anything about you specifically" excuse I often hear, if I meet your criteria then you mean me as well. In the past I would have remained silent, but after what I've seen and what happened to someone dear to me, I won't stay silent about this issue anymore.

@[Corin](/user/show/125990) I don't see any talk of racism anywhere in this story other than John's perspective. The story does not support racism; it merely portrays one main character person who does admittedly have a racist perspective about the character of white men he likes to dominate. I expect there are many many men of all races in the real world who still have racist thoughts and biases. So is Rando saying we shouldn't represent racism even as a perspective to be recognized? Personally I think we need to talk about racial prejudice a lot more in very real ways with the honest intent to minimize it in the real world. With respect to fantasy and fiction I see no problem with race having a part in establishing the values and perspectives of a character in a story, as long as the story itself doesn't propose racism as a real solution for anything. My other objection pertains to Rando's perspective on racism and BDSM in the story. It seems he has an objection with an Alpha of one race dominating a submissive of another race, but also admits to not being interested (or seemingly having much understanding of BDSM or power exchange). This is personal to me because i am white and a submissive bottom boy who finds a lot of Black Men to be physically extremely attractive. Unlike Rando i constantly search for exactly this type of D/s and M/s story (with or without race as a factor). In real life if a Black Man who is dominant and controlling (optionally with addictive pheromones ;) ) were to find me attractive and be looking for a white bottom boy, you think i should call him racist?!! i don't think so. i feel it would be much more fitting to the situation if i were to go to my knees, kiss his feet, and ask how i might serve. (I'm still searching for my own boundaries between fantasy and reality! ;) ) My only serious concern with this story is that it currently only has one chapter -- written a month ago! It seriously stimulated my addiction for good story-telling so i am admittedly a little cranky at this point -- all wired up with nowhere to go! But given that i have weak story-telling skills myself and a D/s reading addiction, my only real comments to the author are: Thanks so much, Sir. How may i serve you, Sir?

@Rando you are, and i say this with the utmost sincerity, phenomenally stupid.

@[boi98229](/user/show/10027285) I haven't read the story itself, so please excuse my ignorance of its actual contents. My answer to Rando was meant as a generic reply, as I didn't approve of his reverse-racism claims in his comments. I totally get your point, and it's the very reason I don't mind sexual raceplay on this site. I'm absolutely aware that this is a sexual fantasy for many people - especially from the submissive side. And that's the same is true for anyone who enjoys reading a story about mind-control from the pov of the controlled person. This is a kink I share personally, so I absolutely understand this desire. People who had no prior experience to these kinks might not understand that, though, and that's why we have to tell them, again and again. In a friendly, polite way.

@[Ragnarok](/user/show/14073) Thanks for the feedback. It's taking a bit longer than expected, but there will definitely be more of Trent in the future. He's ripe to be turned into a true fag.

@[RF Naughty](/user/show/10051968) Thanks for the response. I Love to hear it. I will be kind of maybe..patiently waiting for it to cum out. 😉