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5/8/23, 3:20 AM
The slight awareness at the end coupled with that final manipulated choice was so hot, especially with the doctor’s descent into moral sloth. Awesome story, hope to see part 2!

5/9/23, 6:22 PM
@[Yourmind123](/user/show/221272) It’s just a question of approval at this stage. But once written, I had 4 chapters, not 2 as I originally thought. Because I had more ideas of course.
Martin
5/8/23, 11:46 AM
This is marvellous! 5 for hot, mc and writing. And I'm not easy on my 5s... :)

5/9/23, 6:20 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) Thanks Martin! I’m honoured by your comment. I just uploaded Ch. 2 of 4. The other chapters are written, just need editing. Hope you continue to like it.
Anonymous
5/8/23, 11:09 PM
This was a well crafted Mafisto story, particularly in the way it treaded the line between the #clueless and #aware subgenres, the way it attentively described Ahmed's body, and the way it depicted the "mafistophelian" temptation of the doctor. Still, one eagerly awaits the day when, just as Dr. Wilshire slips over his boundaries and "falls," this founding author of the MC genre will produce a story that fully "falls" into the dark psychological and erotic spaces of #aware stories. How would this story read if written from Ahmed's perspective once he realizes he's ingested Obezol?

5/9/23, 6:14 PM
@Anonymous Thanks! I write stories like the ones I like to read, and I don’t usually like pov-controlled stories. But I’m expanding my range a little so who knows?
5/9/23, 10:46 AM
Ahmed's awareness was, for me, the highlight of this story. And the writing was very effective here indeed. Thanks so much. I look forward to a further episode. What I wondered about was the extent to which the Obezol has a limit for Ahmed? There must be something he wouldn't do? Just a thought :)

5/9/23, 6:11 PM
@[Corinthian38](/user/show/38372) Thanks! You’ll have a partial answer in chapter 2
5/9/23, 4:14 PM
Hey, can't wait for the next story!
BikeUrious
5/9/23, 2:49 PM
Glad to see you back! Can't wait to see how Fred will humiliate his bullies more. Maybe they'll become wild office sluts for Fred and the sales team? Also, I really like the more literary type of writing here, it gives more color to the story. Great job, once again!

benedick543
5/9/23, 3:14 PM
@BikeUrious Thanks! I already have that part written out, so I'll publish it in a week or so. And you're not too far off from what I had planned!
Kipper
5/9/23, 11:25 AM
I appreciate the attention to detail regarding the Phallic Brotherhood, but this series lacks detail when it comes to the sex. It's all obligatory and brief, which meets the needs of the Temple, but perhaps not the needs of the horny reader. Also, the nude beach at the southern end of San Onofre State Beach in Gaviota was closed down by the law in 2010, well before this story was ostensibly written. Since then, patrols have routinely ticketed visitors for nudity at this beach. ☹️ With nudity shut down in California, swinging cocks remain welcome at the wide expanse of Gunnison Beach in New Jersey. Stay away from the dunes, or you will most certainly see some worship services. 😉
Sebastián Apollo
5/8/23, 10:43 PM
Ugh, you have no idea how much this series excites me, dude! When Stan threw out the term "tongue bath", I swear my mouth began to water. I love that kind of raunchy stuff - licking sweaty pits and feet, rimming.You do such a good job with making it flow so clearly with the time cuts between past and present, I could visualize it all in my head like a movie. I concur with the other two commentators - not only does this series tick all my pervy boxes, but it would've been really easy to make the jocks use and abuse Leo to make them the easy targets. But instead, you managed to strike that balance between loveable goofballs and rough, aggressive tops. Keep up the great work!

5/9/23, 6:15 AM
@[Sebastián Apollo](/user/show/10029736) Thank you so much for your kind words, Sebastián! It's essential for me to keep a mix of a rough, aggressive, dominant top but also have them be caring and tender to their subs, otherwise, like you said, it's pretty much abusive. I'll try to keep up to your expectations with the eventual next one!
5/8/23, 10:11 PM
Man this series is so hot and cute! Love how they all care for him :>

5/9/23, 6:13 AM
@Frenzy A dom caring for his boy is essential to me 😌
5/9/23, 5:36 AM
Esplendid! This chapter was better written than first. It was possible to see well the personality Chad had and what he will have in the next chapters. I really want to see the next chapters.