Recent Comments

11/30/25, 2:00 AM
A good short story. I hope the second chapter will also be published here someday. In general, I'm looking forward to the continuation of your unfinished story, which you promised to publish in the near future. And the story stopped on Thursday, if I'm not mistaken. And I think if the story ends with a threesome between them, there's a hint of someone who knows more about the chain's power than Liam, and they'll likely have to return it (perhaps even punish Liam) for stealing it from him. It's unlikely that anyone would give up the power of mind control so easily. And Liam, for some reason, stole it from some unknown person (perhaps he's a sorcerer's apprentice) or is a sorcerer himself but was careless. I hope this Chekhov's gun works (because there was a hint and there's potential).
11/24/25, 6:53 AM
Another great start to your stories. Can't wait to see where the transportation takes him.

11/30/25, 1:55 AM
@[Yorksbiker08](/user/show/1049586) Nowhere good, to be sure :grin:
11/22/25, 7:06 PM
Hope there is more

11/30/25, 1:47 AM
@[Jonanator](/user/show/863971) soon™
11/22/25, 8:13 PM
Great start to a new story! Really looking forward to future episodes. Glad to have your writing back on the site, SleepyAsh!

11/30/25, 1:46 AM
@[Profguy15](/user/show/920341) I have to try being more consistent :sweat_smile: glad you like it!
11/22/25, 11:20 PM
Absolutely incredible! So hot! Can't wait for more

11/30/25, 1:45 AM
@[Bearko](/user/show/10029477) Thanks for reading! :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
11/22/25, 10:11 AM
Fuck that was hot 🥵🥵🥵🥵 you haven’t lost your touch 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

11/30/25, 1:43 AM
@[Glennyboi](/user/show/917433) Hehe, glad you enjoyed :grin:
11/30/25, 1:15 AM
A real writer - making the reader disappear into its structure. It’s own reality. Please continue!
11/30/25, 12:58 AM
Although I understand why the author had to abandon this) then the story would have been very long and new plot lines would have opened up that would have had to be developed. But otherwise, it’s a good sexual story of hypnosis!
11/30/25, 12:56 AM
Great story, but the ending is disappointing because it doesn't answer many questions). 1. How did Aaron and Greg get caught if they knew that Jay hypnotizes people? Are they stupid? (They should have known about his methods) Even if they wanted to use Dak for themselves (for evil) they should have warned their families or Dak's family what Jay did to him (just in case something happens to them)! But I liked everything) but Jay as a character is not revealed at all) The story has an open ending, many questions are not answered (Dak's family should have suspected that something is wrong with him) Moreover, a person doesn't just go from Pilots to flight attendants! (This is if the Admiral asked to become an ordinary private) Yes, for the story it's cool and sexy, but it doesn't make sense for reality) and, on the contrary, it harms Jay himself in the future, since loved ones can investigate and find out his rank or later by hiring a Detective or Psychologist! If you ignore these plot holes, the story itself is written 8/10, the writing quality and erotic part are excellent)
11/30/25, 12:26 AM
Wow you've attracted a few interesting comments. I enjoyed the story. It was short, snappy, and I don't mind a little cruel twist of fate. I write stories with similar themes and believe me, I find it difficult to toe the line between between being too cruel or too light. My personal feedback would be that I'd have loved more details on Derek actually losing his boyfriend. That would be crushing to see your loving partner turn on you just like that. But other than that, it was a fun and hot read! This style of writing won't be everyone's thing, but I feel there is still a place for it.