Recent Comments

HypnoSlave
1/22/23, 7:12 PM
Hey Edlam! I just discovered your work through this series and am glad that you recently posted an update about possibly picking it up again. Your writing is incredibly hot. Can't wait to read more of your stuff!
Jan 22, 2023
Anonymous
1/22/23, 6:10 PM
The story -- the substance is good. Really good, actually! The writing needs editing. Spell check and some grammar, but that's fixable. If you run MSWord, that takes all of two minutes. You'll appreciate it because it cures some of the syntax errors. Remember: you narrate not as you speak. That's why the editing is important. Keep going. It's a good start. I can't wait to read about the ortho-slaves in action.
1/22/23, 5:24 PM
Loved the story man!
1/22/23, 5:21 PM
I love the twist you give on the shaving segment. When you think heโ€™s shaving his body hair or beard and turns out his shaving his head hair! Well written! And pretty hot and to the point! Much appreciated.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 4:30 PM
The story is just FANTASTIC! I loved it. THANK YOU
1/22/23, 3:26 PM
I love this story. The competition between Colt and Jet is exciting. I like to see them on the same level, as if they are trying to outdo each other, but in the end they have the same qualities. Please continue!
1/22/23, 1:56 PM
Agree with Some Guy. Mike is definitely getting off on this now. Wonder if he wants Joey to fuck him next. Excellent story so far
SuperHero_Guy
1/22/23, 1:05 PM
You certainly must breed me I'm ready for you to lead me deeply into Temptation, no turning back to my old life. Go deep, go often, BREED ME ๐Ÿ˜ˆ
Martin
1/22/23, 1:05 PM
This is a very hot story! I look forward to read more of it. I think it's more a Collar than a Spiral story, though.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 12:20 PM
separating by paragraphs would be fine, it is illegible

1/22/23, 12:28 PM
@[Maxigay](/user/show/524184) Sorry, it's my first story here and thought pressing enter would add a line break. Now I've edited it to have the proper paragraph separations, but it's still being reviewed :)