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Wanderer
10/19/25, 3:14 PM
The story flow is good, but your dialog could use some work. Each of your characters uses essentially the same vocabulary and rhythm of speech, so although the things they say individually are fine, in aggregate, it is harder to think of the characters as distinctive. Mason and Leonard are particularly similar, and the lack of differentiation in their behavior makes them essentially clones. Maybe try giving one of them a different reaction to the hypnosis? A bit more resistance from one would help flesh out the characters. A small plot hole: you say that looking away from the cock immediately breaks the hypnosis, but that makes sucking and fucking tricky, so maybe have Oliver be more explicit about commands so they stay in effect when looking away? Having Gregory wake up during that first scene and react badly until the cock is back in view would give you a window to make clear to the reader what the rules of the cock are. That reader understanding will be critical to communicating your future plot points. Typo in your story title -- last word has last two letters flipped.
10/19/25, 3:07 PM
Been a long while since we last had a good old cocknosis story. The classic "yes master"s are hot as always.
10/19/25, 8:42 AM
Great story. I wore a uniform for 21 years doing one of those hyper-masculine army jobs, but it was being dominated and controlled by another man that I needed. True to form, butch in the streets, bitch in the sheets. The tops were the cooks and clerks and truck drivers, while the bottoms were the guys T*m Cl@ncy writes novels about. Cant say I ever got locked in the trunk of my car by a psycho cook, but i'm willing to try!

10/19/25, 1:43 PM
@[Crack Spider](/user/show/10034912) Thanks for the comment. Hyper masculine men getting turned into bottoms is always fun. It certainly pushes my buttons and my imagination to help me write stories.
Iron Sea
10/19/25, 11:30 AM
The mystery of Cerberus deepens! Fucksticks made me laugh and i enjoyed that Jamie's powers seem to work like Gambit's.
10/19/25, 10:13 AM
wow so hot omg i'm so excited for the new chapter
10/19/25, 9:48 AM
I'd love to read more stories implying Dr. Altman. Great series. Thanks
10/19/25, 9:20 AM
It's getting hotter and better every new chapter!
Iron Sea
10/19/25, 8:58 AM
"Fucking idiots, every one of them. What kind of a man would get himself turned into a drone? Even against their will, you had to be a certain type of stupid to end up like that." Hmm, I have a feeling that is going to become dreadfully ironic in the coming chapters. Also Dusk has some cool powers!
Iron Sea
10/19/25, 8:46 AM
Ah, living latex, like a symbiote! I see i see. Mysterious so far. I think New Fairfax is in for some adventures :satisfied:
Anonymous
10/19/25, 7:49 AM
i wonder when did Archie as a drone realize he wanted Jamie? seems like he had a crush on him before all of this, with being protective and all that, but perhaps it was far before the Warehouse