Recent Comments

8/6/22, 4:44 PM
Story seemed rushed, and a lot of disconnects between Mike and the other two characters treating him as a pig. There needs to be more raunchy descriptions, and vulgarity in the characters to exemplify the persona of a biker/trucker/mike. Also, Wizard is used too many times in the beginning when it's lost later on in the story. I believe it would be better to use descriptions to illude to being a wizard rather than explicitly saying it. It seems like you haven't had an actual experience having sex with a trucker/biker/"redneck?" to extrapolate into a fictional story. The story is great for a fast read, but it doesn't exceed into the real darker side of a fantasy. Go harder on describing the experience. This often means writing a lot, and minimalize but without losing the real hard raunchy moments to drive it home; Then add in elements that give a nasty twist by illuding to something to give the reader a shameful hope that something is going to happen and follow up with a realistic-fantasy dark and raunchy delivery. Otherwise, its a good skeleton.
Anonymous
8/6/22, 4:22 PM
I need to see what happens between a full blooded Asian and his mixed race half-brother who despises his heritage. Please. 🥰
8/6/22, 4:12 PM
So hot. Can’t wait to read more!
8/6/22, 4:12 PM
I think the concept of making a clone of yourself is interesting, but I wish there were a bit more motivations in the story. Why did he pick Justin to transform, given that he could pick anyone if he wasn't after their body or mind?
8/6/22, 4:05 AM
This was super fun and hot. What a sexy story. Loved how the sun focused on the he, super sexy. Maybe some godly rimming can happen too. Hehe Buy yeah sexy!

Grayson
8/6/22, 3:52 PM
@Heru Kane Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for letting me know. It means a lot, seriously. Godly rimming sounds fun, I'm kinda bummed that I didn't think of it for this one. Now that it's planted in my head though it'll definitely be in the next bit or the one after. Thanks for the idea!
8/6/22, 3:50 PM
Wow. Can't believe I've been sleeping on this. The way you write Michael's internal changes is so, so hot. Wish Ryan would take me for a spin ;)
Anon
8/5/22, 5:42 PM
Hi! I just wanted to let you know that there are quite a few typos in the story summary, and that’s likely making people not bother reading it since it’s the first exposure they get to the story. No shame here, but it might be a good idea to go back and edit the summary

apollo
8/6/22, 1:44 PM
@Anon oh thanks for the advice. i'll try to fix them
CockLuver
8/6/22, 11:12 AM
Your series is awesome. I hope you make Hank into a slightly older version of his boy. A hot stud who gets trained in the way of the jock bitch. A stud who learns to crave tasty dicks and cum. Pretty please have Hank become the ultimate version of a bottom daddy. A near perfect mirror image of his bitched out boy, Brody.
Anonymous
8/6/22, 8:38 AM
loving the complex web… that things didn’t quite go to plan for Bayer and he got a very hot alternative… can’t wait for the sheriffs to start to fall… and the ending with Deke and Dakota was just pure horiness!!! can’t wait for this all to play out…
8/6/22, 8:09 AM
What an incredible new chapter! Your descriptions of the muscle transformations are achingly hot--I love the denseness of the muscle, and the extended exploration of how it feels to squeeze into small clothing. But even more than that, I loved the grocery store scene. I confess that it's easy for me to feel envious of huge muscular guys, because I do find myself thinking "They must be so desirable. Everyone wants them. I wish I could be like that." But this chapter flips that on its head, letting us into the mind of a muscular person who doesn't WANT to be sexualized, and doesn't NEED attention, but gets judged anyway. Uri remains as annoying as ever, and I can't help but wonder what sort of surprises await for him. I do love that his selfishness and complete lack of imagination are going unrewarded. :p Thanks for an amazing story!