Recent Comments

Tom
4/25/22, 11:52 PM
I love the story, the concept of a gay ghost possessing a heterosexual boy really fascinates me, I want to know what will happen and what Polter will do to Paul and Blake now
Will Ryder
4/25/22, 11:30 PM
This chapter was AWES🤩ME!!! I agree with PupScout, giving Scott a choice was an inspired move👍 Can't wait 2 read what happens next 2 Colin 🐻😘🐻
Apr 25, 2022
4/25/22, 11:02 PM
Loved the story and the callback. A great homage to a true classic, that remained just as hot, with several very creative steps, like your placement of the tattoo, which I thought was perfect. A great approach to the mass enslavement scenario, and it was so gratifying. It's so good I almost wish it was a longer slow burn of yours, but that's cause I want more. Welcome back Hypnothrill!
Will Ryder
4/25/22, 10:14 PM
A great first chapter👍 The setting: a wet night, a cave with warm, glowing amber light & a pheromone laced, honey pool was brilliant 💧🍯🐻🍯💧 And the way Scott was seduced was horny as F**K!!! 🍌😘🍌 I wonder if Scott's friends - Peter, Colin & Rhett will be joining him 🔜 🤔😁😉
Hot!
4/24/22, 11:22 AM
Loved the end :) !

4/25/22, 9:05 PM
Thanks so much @Hot! Definitely one of my favorite endings I’ve written.
4/25/22, 3:43 PM
What does this Croatian translate into English…Nefre fiksu tiun postajon & Vi koleris pri la dioj since I know nothing of Croatian…..plz translate thx
Will Ryder
4/25/22, 1:11 PM
Unexpected & a very cool cliffhanger ending 2 this chapter 👍📖😇📖👍 I can't wait 2 read what happens next 2 Sam, Alan & Ben 💢👀💢
Anonymous
4/25/22, 5:23 AM
Amazing again! Thank you for continuing this. Can't wait for the last part!

4/25/22, 12:44 PM
@ thanks! Comments like that keep me going!
4/24/22, 4:31 AM
Another great chapter! I especially love the contrasts you draw between the genuine love between Ricky and Will and the various depraved sex scenes (plus I’ve always wondered what it would be like to make love in water). I am also especially pleased with how you depict Wang and Johnny’s relationship: the last chapter went heavy on the pain/pure domination side of things, so it was nice to see a healthier show of a BDSM relationship (even Wang’s term, “Boy,” shows a degree of kindness absent from Harlow). I am still hoping Pete gets a heaping helping of just deserts—he’s seemingly gotten away with all of his terrible traits, ha ha—but I know that whatever you come up with will be amazing. Thanks for a great story! :)

4/25/22, 12:44 PM
@Feed Your Head thank you. With so many characters I want to create different dynamics; genuine romance with W&R, softer BDSM with Wang & Johnny and rougher with Harlow; as both can be enjoyed. In real life, i only support healthy BDSM relationships but in a story I'm willing to stretch reality to allow less than admirable qualities... for now. With Pete, he has his own development as a Dominant to go through to learn how to treat subs, a potential that Wang can see. Oh, and sex in water in real life? Do not recommend... water is not a lubricant XD
4/25/22, 10:22 AM
I appreciate what you're trying to do here, providing backstories on who the men were before they became rubber drones. But Marc's backstory is so depressing, I found it really difficult to get back into a sexy mood when reading the rest of the chapter.

Rub.berized
4/25/22, 10:31 AM
@Hypnothrill I fully agree with you want hence I shortened that part. I was honestly a bit moody and felt like it belonged though to the story to give it a touch of what I would like in a story. I'm not at all a good writer so it's always difficult to find the right tone and balance. I hope you give part 5 a try because from now on I have enough characters that were introduced and can give me a solid framework to continue.

4/25/22, 10:43 AM
@Rub.berized It's so difficult to get that tonal balance right. As a writer, I sometimes find that it's useful to create extra backstory in my head for characters, only a small portion of which makes it onto the page. So it might be important for you as a writer to know precisely what personal trauma makes Marc especially vulnerable to the nefarious doctor's offer, but it isn't so important that your reader know all the details. I've been reading all the chapters so far, and I'll continue to keep reading, but I do have one suggestion for you: keep writing in 3rd person, but consider sticking with a single POV character for each chapter. You keep switching back and forth between how Conrad feels and how his subjects feel. I think this chapter, for instance, would have worked better if it just focused on Marc/CT-12's perspective toward his mental transformation.

Rub.berized
4/25/22, 12:21 PM
@Hypnothrill this is a very good advice. Thank you so much.