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Nov 30, 2021
11/30/21, 2:16 PM
I like the premise, but for me, the story is a little too fast-paced. Matt's mental transformation is almost instantaneous, and to me, it would be a lot hotter if he gradually got addicted to the game and corrupted by it.

12/11/21, 12:48 PM
@Hypnothrill Oh, surprised to see you here, haha. Been a big fan of your stuff for quite a while. The story was mostly me just fleshing out a fantasy I had a little, and was written in half an hour, so my own zeal lead to the fast pace. I'm considering doing a second chapter, or just rewriting this one, so its less "Ok be monke now" and more gradual.
12/11/21, 7:16 AM
It's a bit of a mindfuck that this mimbo muscle whore still has brains enough to write so eloquently in his personal logs. lol That was a great epilogue. Although, nowadays, a cop kneeling on a perp's neck has different connotations compared to 2005 when you wrote this.

12/11/21, 11:08 AM
@PEN15LUVR That didn't stop anyone from complaining about it. Yes, i wrote it 15 years ago but it has triggered quite a number of people. That's a shame -- it's just fiction.
12/11/21, 7:45 AM
Great story! Love the point of view from the genie.
12/11/21, 7:42 AM
God this is so great. I am loving every chapter of these
12/11/21, 6:38 AM
OMG that's only Chapter One! Hot hot hot! And also, because I'm a perfectionist, in describing how the cop walked back to your car, it should be a confident gait, not gate. Unless he's corralling otters in his pants, then who am I to judge?
Anonymous
12/11/21, 6:13 AM
interesting idea, but not far left to go. Matthew's mind is gone, as is the resistance . i enjoy the fight or struggle more. Others will probably find later chapters with him enslaved better. But not me. good luck
12/11/21, 4:07 AM
I screamed at the "massive touch screen" of his iPhone4. I feel so old, God...
12/11/21, 2:29 AM
Do you have anything on Kindle?

12/11/21, 2:53 AM
@THAT Steve nope, i dont think they take my kind of stories.

12/11/21, 3:03 AM
@Jack Parker Kyle Cicero has a bunch I've found
12/11/21, 1:05 AM
Oh HELLS yeah! I'm loving this Archie and Gray team-up. Great job, man! I'm excited to see where it goes from here!

12/11/21, 1:38 AM
@Dace Thanks man, I know it's rough in the middle but you have to fall before you can stand up again :)
12/8/21, 10:55 PM
My favorite story series on this whole website, I come back to it over and over.

12/11/21, 1:10 AM
@Lux Phallus glad you enjoyed it. I do have more half done, but they ran out of juice.