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Oct 11, 2021
11/6/21, 1:30 AM
This is so hot. Loved the fact that he's owned, used and treated like a pup. You really brought their power dynamic to life in such a short piece. The use of "boy" and "pup" was such a turn on. Can't wait to see where the story goes, especially with him being sold on. Just wondering, is he happy to be a sub top himbo, or was he forced into being owned/hypno, etc.? It's nice that he's absent-minded a lot of the time as it suits his himbo personality, but it might be good to have some internal thoughts to reflect on how he feels about things, e.g. the prospect of being sold, leaving his old owner, being seen as property, etc. as it would highlight the eroticism of his submissiveness. But an amazingly written and hot start! Well done. :D

12/12/21, 5:05 PM
@Henry Wolf hey, thanks for the comment. I tend to dislike what I write, so I eventually spurt one-shot short stories, kind of "in media res" kind of thing. I like to think that he likes, or loves, being a pet to his owner and I would guess it was somewhat agreed upon. Or as much as an agreement a "this or nothing" relationship can bring… Also thanks for noticing the "boy/pup" mentions, I'm a sucker for these terms of endearment. ;-)
12/12/21, 3:12 PM
hot as fuck
11/10/21, 12:26 AM
This is certainly a hot story, but not sure why, I found the pictures distracting and breaking the rhythm. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter though, it's been a slow burn to get here and I need to see our Colombian guest fall.

11/10/21, 4:02 AM
@Essex Interesting about the pictures! They were definitely essential to my writing process, as I built the entire story around selections from these photo sets, then tried to imagine characters and interactions based on the images. Maybe they just seemed distracting because there were so many of them in this chapter.

12/12/21, 1:48 PM
@Hypnothrill revisiting this topic, I think it's a matter of having to open the pics in another window instead of them being embedded, that may have been what affected the flow for me.
12/12/21, 1:39 PM
you've got a gift. love the backstory.
Jan 22, 2016
12/12/21, 12:36 PM
Please continue writing stories! This was a fun and hot reading. I enjoy your hypnosis files too!
Apr 14, 2012
12/12/21, 10:19 AM
i wish you would write a part two to this story
boi98229
12/12/21, 8:40 AM
Strangest and hottest seduction and power shift I've read yet! I love it!! @JackParker Thanks so much for a great start! i expect i am going to have a hard time putting this one down between chapters.
12/12/21, 7:32 AM
Really great story. I would have preferred some of the transformation to have been subtler, not having the barber telegraph every change explicitly, and perhaps skipping the piss and rubber shirt. I would also have made the barber a bit more professional, skipping the shoe and hookup at the end, and instead have him kicked out still in a state of shock. As he is walking home he is struggling with conflicting emotions being horrified he is at his changes, in disbelief it even was possible and happened, despair about how to revert it, and incredibly turned on by it all. Then he meets the scally group again on his way back and finds them irresistable. I always find it interesting to read different people describe changes for a stereotype, like the shape of the head, the neck, the tattoos. Always an inspiration when you try to describe something yourself.
12/12/21, 6:42 AM
I really liked how this wrapped up. You are a truly good storyteller and I look forward to seeing that you have posted something new. You surprise me with your imaginative and innovative take on often tired cliché genres. I'm DEFINITELY a fan!
12/11/21, 6:22 AM
well i can say a lot of ideas come to my mind but i like how you are developing this i also like good endings sometime but i have to vote for A leave Dickson city into slavery so in some way finally his father and family end abusing him in someway but since the entrance of tech on story i would like Dylan end more as a Prototype of an High Tech Slave more controlled by devices like collar and machinery or electronics more than the Fruit Pounch also maybe him be almost totally aware of what happening to him at that moment, maybe the doctors on story can make it possible and also he can be like a testing product for new sexual devices to be launch to the market

Dylan
12/11/21, 8:55 AM
@Bazir I guess you are aware that i changed the title of this line of stories some chapters ago into " A Dickson Enterprises Story : Dylan " I see a future of more " A Dickson Enterprises Story : XXXX " stories. We already met some possible characters, right? ;-) So new task for anyone who likes to help: Any suggestions ? You guys might wanna check the stories for : Johnny, who got his physicals together with me; Steve, the boy were the fruitpunch didn't work; Ryan the quarterback; Jose, Dylans buddy; Sammy, hitchhiker boy who was worked over by the Artimes twins; Jackie, Buddy from school, altarboy ; Vinnie, Jackies cousin in church dungeon; The asian boy in church dungeon; Jeremy, black boy 22yo, sold earlier as sex slave to german billionair; TBC;-) maybe

12/12/21, 6:16 AM
@Dylan ok then would be good Dylan end as i think, but i think maybe more fitting is Steve the boy that the fruitpunch didn’t work fit well for the setting i have said: end more as a test subject for the developing and testing of new tech in Dickson City and finally becoming a robotized slave with some modifications in the mouth and anus to convert him into the ultimate sex machine