@Jeen Obviously as I wrote it I don’t agree. Josh see, as Mike changed and develops, the issues he’s created in Josh’s world which were not his intention. While he is ultimately not a good person he is upset by that and tries to fix things. His intention was never to mess with Mikes real life in a significant way. I get that the ending may not be for everyone, but it is what it is what I, the author wanted. It is not the most pleasant experience after writing for several weeks a total of more than 80 pages to have someone speak of your work in the tone which you have chosen. It is often something that makes me not pursue an idea. I do not think that a romance bourn out of an unwitting hypnosis gone awry qualified as a generic gay love story. I wish you all the best and hope you, and others can enjoy the catalogue of stories I’ve posted so far. This will certainly be my last for some time.

@[LockedPig](/user/show/10049274) You don’t seem to realize how uncomfortable a narrative situation you unintentionally created by the end of your story, that’s all. My tone isn’t trying to be anything, you’re reading a textual comment without the context of hearing how it would be said in-person, the tone you think it has is whatever you choose to personally read in to it as. I’m just honestly sharing how I feel about the story and my personal feelings happen to be critical of the ending (I never said the rest of the story was bad, only that the ending retroactively affects it negatively. In fact, the rest of the story, the writing style, and the kinks were all incredibly hot). You’re assuming that there’s a mean tone to it when I’m just stating something in plain language that isn’t sugarcoated because I’m trying to be constructive. There’s no need to take it personally. It doesn’t mean you’re a bad author, it just means that the way this story played out is one that just happened to get away from you and unfortunately created some very creepy implications in-universe because Josh, whether or not he meant to “mess up” Mike’s life overall, still chose to sexually assault him multiple times without repenting at all. I don’t think it’s unfair of me to think that it consequently makes their eventual romance awkward. Notice, by the way that you didn’t actually refute what I said about that issue. You can choose to assume that I’m trying to be mean and get discouraged or you can choose to take it as constructive criticism for future reference. It’s just one person’s opinion about the story. I never said anything personal about you, I never made fun of you, and I never said that the whole story was terrible. Every writer makes mistakes, and I think you just happened to make a mistake in how you set up the ending to this story, it’s not a big deal it happens to us all eventually. Reacting by threatening not to release anything anymore comes across as very spiteful and unfair to the rest of your readers who enjoyed this story. When you release a story you have to accept that it may be criticized. It’s not personal. There’s literally a dozen other replies gushing about how much they loved the story. If you don’t wanna hear what anybody who’s disappointed has to say then read what the others have said again and ignore what I said.

@Jeen I would encourage you to take your own advice. When you post, multiple times in rapid succession about a persons work it absolutely comes across as aggressive. I shall take you at your word about your intention. I am not being childish in saying that I shan’t be posting on this forum in the near future. Working on this story and the way that some, not just yourself, have chosen to speak about it have taken the joy out of writing here. I encourage you to remember, when you next wish to offer constructive criticism, that the people writing these stories are do so for their own joy and are choosing to share it with you. How one reacts to that will certainly affect how the creators feel about their work and their wish to make more.

@[LockedPig](/user/show/10049274) I split up what I wrote into smaller comments so as to not overwhelm you or anybody else who read it. Again, you took that as aggressive but there’s nothing inherently aggressive about it, it’s how you chose to see it because you might have been feeling defensive. Yes, you are being childish by saying that you won’t be posting again anytime soon because a few people out of many have said something critical. You’re saying that it takes the joy out of what you write. If that’s true then you’re not writing for the right reasons, if you’re happy with it and are glad to share it you shouldn’t care what a minority of people think about it or not be open to what they’re suggesting. You can’t post it to a forum and expect literally everyone who reads what you post to love everything about it. That’s not realistic. Did you expect to never be criticized at all? Your joy in posting fun stories shouldn’t be so easily swayed by a couple of people giving constructive criticism to one part of one story. I think you’re blowing it massively out of proportion. Take some time, take a deep breath, it’s not that serious. Don’t let me spoil anybody else’s fun, I didn’t think that writing out a critique to the ending would trigger you so badly. I genuinely thought you would appreciate constructive criticism as input from a fellow community member who’s trying to give an input that show’s you how you can continue to improve your already great skill. To me, writing is something that’s inherently meant to be shared, and if I were in your position I would expect and hope that I would get criticism from readers that are meant to help me realize an internal inconsistency in a plot element so that for my next story I could keep that in mind just to remember that within my narratives I can’t forget earlier plot points that should logically have consequences in the end. If you only want comments with a positive and non critical tone just put a disclaimer at the start of your stories, and no one will criticize. Easy. It just doesn’t seem at all fair to me to react so badly to what is ultimately a minor criticism, just saying that the ending to one story, that is overall good, out of many good stories you’ve written, happens to be awkward to me. Just because what I wrote was thorough doesn’t mean it’s that serious. To treat that like something so horrible actually kind of hurts MY feelings because I didn’t mean to make you feel so bad and I had no prior indication that you don’t like to be critiqued at all, so now I feel like I’ve just ruined everything for a talented author who in general makes great stories and for their entire audience just because I said I didn’t like the ending of one story in, believe it or not, an effort to help you. This site will be much less kinky and interesting with the you gone, you’re one of my favorite authors and I would only criticize a story element because I’m invested in what you write and want to see it be the best it can be. So I’m sad that you’ve made this decision, I hope you will reconsider once you think about what I said with a more open mind.

When you say that we’ve “ruined your joy” or something like that, that you’re just not gonna share what you write anytime soon because of it, it feels like you’re purposefully guilting me and others for doing something that we didn’t know was off-limits for you. I’m sure you don’t intend for it to be manipulative but that’s how it feels being in my shoes right now, like what I said is being twisted around and blown up and used as a cudgel against anyone who might dare to say that one single part of your writing isn’t their favorite.

This is an official admin comment on what occurred in this thread, and what we want comment sections to look like for the sake of readers, authors, and commenters. Constructive criticism is welcomed on this site, and it is never against the rules to provide constructive criticism. That said, there is a delicate balance to be struck between constructive criticism and the feelings of the author, who has done a hard and vulnerable thing in sharing their work publicly. We feel that Jeen's comments constituted constructive criticism. However, the use of morally loaded words like 'creepy', 'rape', and 'sexual assault' is an exceptionally delicate matter on a site where we all engage with dubiously consensual or nonconsensual fantasies involving mind control. Many people on this site feel uncomfortable with their fantasies; others feel comfortable with their fantasies but don't feel comfortable with stories involving 'realistic' noncon; yet others don't care at all. Using words like this on a story that really _is_ fantastical can hit really close to home for many people. We will most likely develop a guideline for comments that asks commenters to consider very carefully before they use sensitive words like those used by Jeen. However, we cannot ask commenters to refrain from constructive criticism. We simply ask that all commenters who wish to provide constructive criticism think carefully about how their words will be received by authors. It's important to realise that LockedPig is expressing real negative feelings they have experienced as a result of this criticism. This story is blessed with a lot of positive comments that can help balance out the hard feelings that come from criticism, but not all stories will receive such positive feedback. When it comes to constructive criticism, I always include a compliment. Jeen's first few critical messages were _very_ critical, exhibiting a strong tone of disappointment and possibly judgment. Before we issue constructive criticism, we should check our tone and remember to be kind. [Those who previously read this comment thread may recall that we initially accused Jeen of 'harassment'. We have removed that accusation and feel it was an overreaction on our part. This message better represents our official opinion on how we all ought to conduct ourselves in the comments section.]

@[MChicago](/user/show/10024403) Thank you for the kind words 😊 I’m glad you’re enjoying my work! I’m hoping to have another chapter out soon

@MASTER PASCUAL would love to suck you and clean your nikes

@[monarch_mvl118](/user/show/28683) Thank you buddy , no apologies needed , I am so grateful for all comments , likes or ratings. There is definitely more to Cum ☺️