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Ravenclaw
10/5/21, 8:14 PM
I liked the writing style. Was different. hope there is no age gap. Great
10/5/21, 2:05 PM
Nothing against this story, which I think is well-written, but I wasn't seeing any mind control here, and so I wonder if this would be better suited for the new site (Gay Cupid Stories).

10/5/21, 2:30 PM
@Hypnothrill Doesn't always have to be fantasy style mind control. This was indoctrination, which is as close to real mind control as it gets. With a realistic (or at least plausible) body transformation too.

10/5/21, 3:46 PM
@amul If there was more indoctrination--that is, if the Recruiter had to work harder to convince Gilbert to change his values and goals--then I wouldn't have any objections. As written, however, the Recruiter barely says ten words to the kid before he's totally abandoning his old personality. That lack of resistance firmly places the story in the "fantasy style mind control" category for me.
10/5/21, 2:11 PM
chapters will feel more congruent if it remains gentle
10/5/21, 12:43 PM
I love this. I hope you continue with “Daddy”. I loved that it was from the jocks POV, my only wish was that the sex had waited until he was completely enthralled and commanded to be desperate to breed his master with his huge penis.
10/5/21, 11:15 AM
Wicked story, loved it and especially enjoyed the rarely-used "company memo/press release" story format. Well done. As for tagging, I would recommend a somewhat more generic tag along the lines of "detachable body parts" which while uncommon, would see more use and be more widely applicable than body part teleportation while still cluing the readers in to what kind of kink they were about to see.

10/5/21, 11:19 AM
@amul thanks! ah there is a detachment tag. I assume that's what it means so I updated the tags. If it actually means something else someone let me know.
10/5/21, 12:33 AM
Great dialog with the computer. Barista is a jerk....he realizes a dog can understand what they're saying and he leaves? I'd be on my knees asking him how do I too turn into a dog? And I loved the description of scents when he was looking for the Barista after he left.

10/5/21, 10:55 AM
@PupScout I still think I'd react the same way the Barista did... it would freak me out too! Thanks for your kind words.
boi98229
10/5/21, 7:00 AM
Intriguing, but not sure quite yet what to think so far.

10/5/21, 10:54 AM
@boi98229 Well, here's hoping you like where it goes!
10/5/21, 10:52 AM
I really enjoy "improvement" transformation stories where the sub grows personally and physically without being negatively impacted (e.g.; turned into an idiot).
10/5/21, 10:37 AM
please continue
Anonymous
10/5/21, 9:48 AM
Loved the haircut element. Would have loved it to be even more descriptive and perhaps tied into some brainwashing element.