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SC Walker
7/27/21, 3:29 PM
The sex parts of this story are some of the best I've ever read. It ticks all my boxes for sure - especially the lubed up holes. Though, I gotta agree with the other commentator about Gabe's recent developments. I like it when smaller guys top bigger guys, but that's a personal preference. But, I also felt like it was very important to the story Gabe and Sam's bond of friendship had mutual respect. For example, I liked seeing Gabe be a wingman for Sam. It was nice to illustrate their supportive friendship in that way. Gabe seems to be falling into that trap of thinking "dominant" is the same thing as "being a jerk". I understand that may be the intention, but I can't help but feel like it wasn't. After all, you still want your readers to root for Gabe... It would be different if it was framed like Gabe nudging Sam to experiment more as a means of helping him, freeing him from discomfort. I liked how apologetic Gabe was last chapter when Sam was inadvertantly affected by his impulsive edit. Yet this chapter he doesn't continue any of that care or concern. I'm not trying to dictate your story to you or make demands, I just think maybe your intentions didn't come through and maybe the text could be misinterpreted. As a writer, sometimes people misunderstand my stories as well - and I try to clarify and fix it to reduce confusion. Anyways overall a fantastic, hot story!
7/27/21, 8:35 AM
What a cool world you've created! This was hot. Can't wait

7/27/21, 2:44 PM
@GiveInToTheMusk Thank you so much! definitely standing on the shoulders of giants there with a bit of our own twist! Really appreciate the encouragement!
7/27/21, 12:19 PM
Such incredible world-building! The story is equally sinister and hot. Great writing!

7/27/21, 2:43 PM
@Hypnoguy67 thank you so much! I do seem to lean more towards sinister in my writing than sweet these days ^^ I look forward to sharing more!
7/27/21, 1:54 PM
I’m all in on this story. I think it’s so hot. To me, this chapter is the sexual payoff to what’s been brewing in the story until now. Gabe thinks he’s the smarter one of the two of them, and Sam tends to agree most of the time, but they’re both dumbasses. Sam keeps making changes that land him in awkward, gayer and gayer situations, and keeps making decisions that won’t take him out of them. Gabe wants to be more thoughtful with his changes, but has an ego and is easily convinced (by Sam’s ribbing and by his own dick, when he makes edits to the book while horny). This chapter let me/the reader fully experience beefed up, muscle stud dom top Gabe and his fantastic dick, and his amazing voice. I didn’t feel like Gabe was too much, or like Sam couldn’t say no. Gabe did phrase things like commands/demands, but Sam made all the first moves. You could argue that Gabe orchestrated things that way, but he hasn’t actually been that clever so far. If he was, the scene would have been a much more satisfying ending for Gabe.
7/27/21, 12:52 PM
i came back from vacation yesterday and unfortunately there was no buddy system implemented while i was gone 😩😭
Anonymous
7/27/21, 11:58 AM
This might be blasphemous at the core but what about priests and altarboys? =P
7/27/21, 5:55 AM
God that was soooo hot, you never fail to get me off
Jamestown Hypno Dom
7/27/21, 5:06 AM
I would like to hear about how the teacher first learned about his abilities.
The_Supernatural_D
7/27/21, 3:35 AM
I love a story with a good happy ending.
7/27/21, 3:08 AM
Rereading the full story again, is even hotter to see the slow and delicious transformation of everybody, but especially Cody's. On the first chapters he had an air of confidence and a manly attitude that he progressively lose. Not that he's becoming a sissy, but he's certainly becoming less manlier, less assertive and I love that. A line that blew my mind is when Mr. Gordie says "Walkin ‘round here without your daddy to hold your hand". Man, what a way to demasculinize him! the rest of the dialogue and how Cody is reduced first to a fearful wimp, and later to a horny slut is pure gold. The cherry on top of the cake is Nate taking part on the debasement of his Boss' son, there's so much to enjoy here. Something that caught my attention powerfully was the line of "the sheriff is wearing NOTHING but some briefs". Man, that left me with so many questions and possibilities. I can't get tired of this story nor get enough of it!!!