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Anonymous
7/12/21, 3:26 PM
Isn't the guy aware of everything while this is happening even more rapey? I understand everyone's concern about it being rapey, but this is a mind control/hypnosis site for fantasies lol. Most of the stories I read do not have this type of "blank face" trance which I enjoy about Hypnosis. Maybe because they want to make the guy seem to "enjoy" it and be less rapey, even though it's a mind control fantasy site lol. So I just had to chime in that a big part of hypnosis/control for me is when the guy is mindless and follows every order with a blank face and I don't think I have seen much of that after Hyptrance stopped writing. So yes, less rapey stories are great and there are so many of them on the site. Love the feedback presented here and always chime in with feedback to better the story, but still keep the style the author wrote with if they like, in this case, a mindless trance lol. Sorry for the wall of text, but I feel I have to put in my two cents lol. The whole fantasy to to have blankface emotionless men and this story did it for me and I hope that people will continue writing more of this, if they choose to do so.

Anonymous
7/13/21, 12:03 AM
I couldn't agree more
7/12/21, 9:29 PM
I really wish I could be a boy in that world. Love the story!
7/12/21, 7:51 PM
Great ending! Love the domestic setup!
7/12/21, 4:47 PM
Holy fuck this is a great story. Jesus Christ. You deserve to win the whole contest.

7/12/21, 7:15 PM
@Norismo Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed :)
Anonymous
7/12/21, 6:35 PM
wonderful story. Would love to see what else mr Jabour is up to :)
7/12/21, 4:40 PM
so, Jorge and John ended up together?

Anonymous
7/12/21, 6:15 PM
@darkblade2814 Nope, John and Penelope; John was just surprised Jorge was there and wanted to catch up.

7/12/21, 6:19 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) I got it, the pharsing was a bit ambigous, but I'm not a native speaker of English, so I may be mistaken
7/12/21, 11:18 AM
I'm a sucker for cutesy endings. I will say the pacing feels off for me, it wraps up very quickly, but I like the back-story for Hunter, and his relationship with his parents. Honestly the part where the family is just looking at the tabloid photos is my favourite part of the whole thing. Also, I thought Ollie was going to end up with John. There are enough characters to make another chapter, or twelve. Hope this story continues! It kind of feels like the start of a sit-com. Penelope can cause some mischief.

Anonymous
7/12/21, 6:14 PM
@Norismo Yup. When I decided to try to write the idea out, there was only a day left in the contest. For me, that means there was basically only time to write a first draft, have one second view time, and a basic edit (not much more than a spell check). I did make some decisions to minimize my want-to-make-massive-edits-mode, but it definitely affected the pacing. John was a purposeful mislead, since I felt like if it were too obvious, the whole gameshow part could feel like a long, boring exposition dump where no gay stuff could happen until after it.
7/12/21, 4:52 PM
I really enjoyed this one! Definitely an intriguing workplace... superb sex scenes -- you really kept that line of fantasy and reality blurring in a satisfying way.
7/9/21, 7:45 PM
Great Story! Glad he enjoys his new body.

screamingmoist
7/12/21, 4:34 PM
@Cutlerfan Thanks! it was fun to have a guy get slimmed down and actually enjoy it.
7/12/21, 4:18 PM
Though this is revenge, there isn't any humiliation. The bully isn't a jerk enough for more than this and the MC isn't evil enough to hurt him. Well, it's really well done overall. There is no angst that could kill my boner so it's a really pleasant surprise. Good job. Continue like that.