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LuckyFontane
5/31/21, 2:18 PM
This is my first story! Please tell me everything you think about it. I hope you understand my English since it is not my native language.

5/31/21, 9:08 PM
@LuckyFontane I think you did amazing! personally I'm a huge fan of stories where there is awareness and a straight guy is "made" into a plaything. just like in this, the shrinking dick and the tattoo was a nice touch! if you ever do a pt2 I would love to see what happens when he gets deployed as a SPU. Also if you're into it (I am but feel free to disagree) you could do like in the breeding season, SPUs also are able to get pregnant due to the exposure to sperm or something... maybe a pill given to him forcefully

5/31/21, 9:10 PM
@LuckyFontane also like while he's deployed his teacher, best friend or maybe even sibling/parent end up using him (potentially for breeding if not here)

LuckyFontane
6/1/21, 10:28 AM
@Pakibttm Thank you for the feedback. While I actually didn't plan a sequel, this gave some great ideas :) So maybe, there will be one, but it will take a while ;)
6/1/21, 10:19 AM
I am LOVING this. The changes to Rob's mind are so subtle that the reader feels hypnotized, too; I love when he contradicts himself (he goes from thinking that he can't tell the ghosts he's onto them to happily asking about the other ghosts, for instance). A slow burn is beautiful for this type of story: gradual mental changes, and the massage was achingly hot. Incredible!
6/1/21, 9:39 AM
We need more of this
6/1/21, 8:30 AM
Interesting, lets see how it goes
Daniel
6/1/21, 2:52 AM
wish the 'taking and corruption' took a bit longer dude I.J.S.
Pup Tyler
5/31/21, 10:38 PM
Very nice part. I would love to see the next one
5/31/21, 10:08 PM
Hot story, the dialogue is great. A modest criticism though, there are some grammar and punctuation issues that're pretty pervasive. Excessive commas and exclamation points, some issues with paragraphs that lead me to lose track of who's speaking. Small fixable issues in an otherwise great story
5/31/21, 8:34 PM
@ArdanWolfe Oh that hit the spot! Like three times today alone! LOL Thank you for a very satisfying chapter and as always, I look forward to the next part.

5/31/21, 10:02 PM
haha I'm very glad to hear, I just write as the scene unfolds to me. I was nervous about this chapter at first but I think it definitely picked up 😁@Uncle Arctos
Marc
5/31/21, 8:36 PM
Great story! I particularly love the description of the i mind control.
Lakritz24
5/31/21, 8:26 PM
The story is exiting, but short. Think further, and writhe! Jo.Jo.ZE.