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nycboot
5/23/21, 2:11 AM
I like this story and I want to like it more. The following is only my personal opinion which you are free to disregard. Once I got through the first paragraph I was sure I was missing chapter 1 and spent a good amount of time looking for the non-existent chapter 1. That's because you introduce us first to Mike and because we have not seen/experienced anything he's done wrong, we empathize with them. As a result, it makes Zach look like an irrational and crazed man. There were actually passages where I said to myself "If only the author had created a better introduction, all the sadistic things he's doing could be even hotter." That's because we, the audience, would also learn to hate Mike and wish him the worst possible end, while sympathizing with Zach who had to go through such emotional torture. But because you don't have any of that (and you can't achieve that through a flashback), Mike seems like he's innocent, and Zach seems like he's just an insane sadist. Perhaps you can try for a chapter 1 and make this chapter 2. Thanks for writing.
5/23/21, 1:50 AM
I hope that Eli can keep going to his workouts. The idea of him repeatedly coming home like, "VALENTINE!!!" Because Gloria explained to him **again** that Jake is his only roommate is hilarious.
5/21/21, 7:25 PM
this was great! well written and with so much promise for whats to come...

5/23/21, 1:10 AM
@redwood Thank you, thank you. Part 2 will be published imminently - hope you like where it goes!
5/22/21, 7:34 PM
that was so amazing, i felt my cock hardening so much during the transformations

5/22/21, 9:25 PM
@jakey Imagine a world where you COULDN'T feel your cock hardening...?
5/22/21, 7:57 PM
cant wait until your next chapter. no love needed just more sex between them
Yourguy92
5/21/21, 5:27 AM
Very good chapter and like so many others I'm Chris curious to continue the path of 217 and 107.

5/22/21, 7:20 PM
@Yourguy92 Hey Chris. Awesome, thanks for reading.
5/22/21, 5:57 PM
un gusto haberte ayudado aunque sea un poco :3 la historia tiene mucho potencial y espero.que puedas continuarla pronto ^ ^
edhypnofan
5/22/21, 4:03 PM
I always like a stage hypnotist story, cliched or not, but this was really short. We need more to it to really invest in it and the characters!
Anonymous
5/22/21, 1:07 PM
How he got that controlled would be a great story! And then, a sequel!
5/22/21, 12:05 PM
This was one of the first stories I read of yours Absman. Still one of my all time faves and one that has influenced several of my stories. Love it. Also, still gets me off ;-p

5/22/21, 12:36 PM
@Tattcub SUCCESS!!!!