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5/10/21, 3:28 PM
Wow, this is a very hot story!
5/10/21, 2:27 PM
I love the foreshadowing you did with Tomas, the stepdad's, Nestor's, grandfather. I honestly can't help but want to see what his stepson does to him now that Nestor's helpless against him. I love all your stories, but I always wanted to see how you would write a story where the viewpoint is from the controller, rather than the controlled. I also want to see how the story might be different, if the person in control is someone who cares about the one being controlled, rather than just using him casually, or in name only, and than throwing him away. All in all, is such an exciting start! Can't wait to see what comes next!
5/10/21, 1:45 PM
I don't know how the device works, but since it was over the phone, it was unclear to all. I was almost hoping that Jordan was listening in to see what was happening to his stepdad thinking he was safe, only to find that as soon as the phone hung up he caught himself saying, "My name is Nestslut and I’m nothing but a dumb fucking slut that can’t learn for shit."
5/10/21, 1:27 PM
I rarely comment, but this is one heck of a new story. On one hand I wish I hadn't read it yet because the suspense is killing me and I wish I could just binge read this once the whole story is over, but on the other hand the setup is just sooooo good I'm already imagining so many scenarios that can play out!
5/10/21, 1:04 PM
Welcome back! Can't wait to see where this goes.
5/10/21, 10:42 AM
So the mind control here is extremely hot. I'm not really digging the characterization of Jordan. I get that he's attracted to his stepdad, but I feel like he should be a little more scared and concerned for the man when he sees him under Ace's complete hypnotic control. Right now, I'm feeling like if Jordan got mind controlled by Ace as well, it would serve him right.
5/10/21, 10:14 AM
I'm so glad you're back !! missed you so much This new story is off to a very hot start. Your writing just hits all the right spots of mind control for me. Didn't know about your Tumblr. I'll go ahead and follow that straight away. Thanks for writing :) edit: noticed this is just a one off :(
5/10/21, 9:29 AM
once again awesome! thank you!
5/10/21, 8:32 AM
i love coming back to this story!
May 5, 2021
Blackjinx123
5/10/21, 6:07 AM
Short, sweet, and hot as hell! Great first addition to this site! I especially liked the protagonists change from shy to dominating. That, and the way he took charge, but lost himself to pleasure and power towards the end. Congrats, jack, i cant wait to read more of your work! :)