Thank you for even taking my humble suggestions into consideration..[I think we're on a similar wave-length as I've enjoyed many of the same stories that you've selected..just wish I was half the writer you are !!!].... Please start chapter 2 with a brief rehash of the important last suggestion that Tommy was given by his brother...Since his memories are being changed, it would be very hot for us to read what his new altered memories of his earlier youth NOW are ! ...Since he now thinks of himself as having always been a weak, skinny little non-athletic NERD with a tiny little PEE-PEE, it would be very exciting to 'relive' some of his 'new', implanted memories of high school and home life, as well as what he now thinks he has always thought of his strong, manly & now in his mind , 'older' & manlier brother...Remember little boys have a more juvenile vocabulary, referring to their penis as their 'wee wee' or 'pee pee', when going to the restroom they say their going to the potie or doing #1 or #2, referring to their parents as Mommy or Daddy, etc.....[I still think you might consider putting him in diapers for his own protection [??] Although it would definitely hurt the story if he dropped-out of school,[ although his teachers might notice his now more child-like behavior & that his grades have dropped to well below average], he should find he now has to study twice as hard, since his schoolwork is now far too advanced for his more child-like understanding... Also, regardless of being 'straight' or ''gay', Tommy's interest in women should now totally revert to a 'pre-puberty' level, his thinking of them now only as possible 'care givers'or mommy substitutes.. As I previously mentioned, at some point toward the end of the story, ether by accident or deliberately his brother might use his device on himself, turning himself [at least, in his own mind] into the kind of 'Real Man' he has always wished he was & has now already permanently created in his older brothers mind, as well as really seeing and treating his NOW totally weak, little [inferior] & now 'younger' brother the way he has 'recreated' him to be.[ He might even turn into something of a macho Homophobe & mean Bully in regards to his now inferior little 'fag' of a brother!].....Of course if you're planning a substantially longer story, this amazing device could then be brought into their HOME & the boy's Parent's could have their former perceptions & past memories of their two sons totally & permanently changed as well..I Would love to see how their Mom & especially their macho Dad would than treat them...[Something to at least think about??? ?]...Sorry I've gone on so long, but its been exciting to be able to actually 'talk' to the author of a story you really love...

I like a few stories on here that get right to the point :) Sometimes these 10,000 plus word ten chapter opus works can be challenging to keep following over multiple installments. Thanks for this story!

loved this! we need more stories like this.

A wonderful chapter - thank you! It's interesting that at the outset, it seems as if the symbiont totally took over the human host. But now we see that there's a lot of nuance there (at least for now?). The soldier subplot never really interested me that much but I see it supplies a lot of momentum and build up to the various threads. You didn't mention it here but I'm really curious about the new "Great One" and what's to become of the deputy. It seems that when a human becomes a great one, most of his human desires are removed and he's just a vessel for the symbiont. Anyway, lots of good stuff to ponder and j/o to. :)

Definitely have to agree that it's a bit rushed. Emilio has all the time in the world, so he could really sink his hooks not only into Hank but into the other guards. Hell he could be running the prison if he wanted to. The idea asks for a slow burn approach to it.

Thanks for the kind words everyone. I have really enjoyed writing this. And good suggestions tiny tim. I will do my best to write more as soon as I can. The nice comments definitely help motivate me.

So is the Lieutenant going to make Devin a full symbiont or just a familiar? I propose familiar since it would fit into the military hierarchy; Devin did come through for them but they still gotta see if he has the material to be a member of the squad full time.

It did seem a bit rushed. Would like to have read more of Hank's transition from ladies' man to cocksucker.

Little sad that this change made him forget/unaware of what the wish did to him. Nice to see his "friends" getting sucked into it too. Keep up the hot work :)

A good second chapter. I especially like the suggestion's changing Tommy's past memories at the end of the chapter...This was a tease, however...wish there had been a few more memory changes...Always enjoy stories where a bro's current behavior is altered due to the implant of false prior memories...In addition to sucking his thumb, perhaps Tommy should need to , sleep with his favorite childhood teddy bear, wet his pants when he gets excited., be shy & fearful around manly [Alpha] guys, remembering the implanted memory of being bullied throughout high school, [but feeling that somehow he deserved this treatment..looking-up to his bully's !] It shouldn't take too long for Tommy's new childish behavior [& desire to suck nerd;s cocks to be noticed by the his fellow students around campus & their behavior and treatment of him to change dramatically . Of course he should expect & welcome it. Also the college Bully's should take notice of this and get-to-work !!! .....PLEASE DON'T KEEP US WAITING TO LONG FOR CHAPTER 3, can't wait for his brother to get back & make a few more changes !!!.....Thank you.