Recent Comments

8/29/20, 3:28 PM
Great work HL! I enjoyed the ride and I think that even if Jafar was all-powerful and therefore, the one to win eventually, the whole trip was an amazing adventure. The waiting for each new chapter was compensated by well-written descriptions and a variety of interesting and captivating transformation scenes. Every time I though I knew what was coming next, I was surprised by an unexpected but very pleasant turn of events. Jafar's win was obvious from the very beginning, but I didn't read the story for its end, I read it because I was interested in the way the characters would evolve, get together, fight for each other, and since we are talking about spiral stories, eventually be corrupted and turn into something else, something new. Thank you for this great story and I hope we will soon read something new from you. Good luck for the future!
8/29/20, 3:18 PM
I am super interested in where this is going. Love the look into the separate lives of the men and i can't wait to see what happens next.
8/29/20, 2:41 PM
The mindset scenes were great. The sex scenes wwre fantastic. The pov switches were well done. The potential plot of owning a gym is very cool. That said, the breakdown at the end was less than interesting to. Not a fan of that at all.
8/29/20, 1:50 PM
more please
Scott
8/29/20, 1:39 PM
The idea is hot and i see its got a very big potential too it. Saying that some editing and rewording might need to be done too make it easier to read and follow seamlessly. Good luck continuing on.
8/29/20, 1:32 PM
Thanks Man, I Love!
Alex Later
8/29/20, 12:36 PM
Thanks for all the positive comments, English is not my native language, so I screwed up a bit, depending on the on-line translator, but I will definitely use Grammarly
8/29/20, 12:35 PM
I'll take that! I agreed with you back when I originally chose to finish this series, that when you give a character absolute power, there is very little that can stand in their way. That being said, a some people wanted me to continue the story, so I thought I took it in the most natural direction that I could. We got to see a few different perspectives on life post-Jafar, all the while knowing that he was going to win - it was an inevitability. But I enjoyed the ride... I'm in the process of putting together a story where a different author writes each chapter - in order to try to increase my writing skills and creativity... it'd be great to have some talented writers involved, if you're interested?
8/29/20, 12:29 PM
Oh, so that's the explanation for the hooker, good! We starting to see Jay take a bit more pro-active role, but he is still the chew toy of everyone else. Please continue, this is a really good story!