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5/18/20, 11:29 PM
Finally i can connect as post my review very nice chapter i like very much the design of the Restrain machine and the purpose for the addition data collecting i wanna ask the reddish brown haired boy is someone from the italyan block?
Elm
5/18/20, 10:53 PM
I love this story! hopefully you can continue it at some point. Take care!
5/18/20, 10:51 PM
I agree with bucke! This is getting really awesome. I also think you've improved on capturing the essence of Wishbone's writing. You are doing a good job, New Guy. I love men in suits and the Captain's conversion was very, very sexy. A slight criticism, though. If I remember correctly, the way the recruits worked in the original story was that the wristband did the sting and the men immediately had a painful erection. Then when the snake coils around their bodies and bites their carotid artery, the lust venom makes them ejaculate and then theyre converted into slaves. It's no big deal really, but I feel like its important to stay true to the source material. But the cocoon stuff that you added, the oath of service and the black uniform are such great additions that you made. I also love the cameo from Jason in the end (at least I assumed it was him). Overall, such a stellar job. Please keep writing more!
5/18/20, 10:41 PM
no problem
5/18/20, 10:34 PM
This is a thoroughly engaging, well-written series. I hope there are many more posts to come.
5/18/20, 10:27 PM
Sorry Darkblade2814, i couldn't quite get with . maybe one day I'll rewrite it, I'm sure i can do better.
5/18/20, 10:12 PM
I hope he gets the police chief too!
Anonymous
5/18/20, 10:06 PM
i wish you could give us a description of how Mikey, sorry McFaggy looks. For no reason I imagine him pale, tall, brown hair, cuter than handsome, and not really that fat but chubby enough to get enough mocks about his weight. that's me, but I'd like to know how you imagine him
5/18/20, 10:02 PM
I was hoping for more when it comes from the guardians
5/18/20, 9:35 PM
Thanks! I'm actually a little inspired by some of your stories so I'm glad you like!