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5/15/20, 9:16 PM
@The Grower: Thank you for reading my story. You're entitled to your opinion, but I have to disagree with you on nycboot's potential ending to Bargain. I don't see nycboot as being so dismissive of wishbone blue's work as you do; I think he, just like myself, is a fan of the original series and will try to do it justice. Plus how he reacted to Slave Academy should not be taken as how he reads Bargain. If anything, I should think you take it as an exercise of completing the uncompleted work. If it is a good ending, then you can read it with the original story; if it doesn't then see it as an not so good attempt to finish the work. But coming in with a prejudice towards nycboot based on a reaction to a different story seems rather small-minded.
5/15/20, 8:37 PM
This was very very hot.
5/15/20, 8:32 PM
Okay, you finally got me to give straight 5's. Tickling and/r uncontrollable laughter is one of my biggest turn-ons in stories like these and I almost never see it on GSS. Keep it up, my friend!
NzDom
5/15/20, 8:31 PM
Yet another hot hot hot chapter.! And please please please double mind fuck next chapter with Mikey lol
Anonymous
5/15/20, 7:57 PM
This was hot!!🔥🔥
Anonymous
5/15/20, 7:46 PM
Super hot story! Love the slow decent into submission. Lan breaking down Thor's barriers, not even knowing hes submitting more and more. Hope to read about Lan using Thor's size and build to please him more.
5/15/20, 7:06 PM
@Hypnothrill: I didn't like it either. To be honest, I wasn't too giddy with the second half of this entire series, as I was already checked out by chapter 5 or so. I already mentioned about how I dislike Lane as a character, but I also dislike that its HIM that gets to take down all of the major players in the series. I feel its because Lane is such a late comer into the game and not involved in the action at all that it just feels so jarring that it gets to be him that bested Todd. On top of that, Lane had been spending the past how many chapters running around and almost getting caught that it required a lot of suspension of belief to believe that he would have so many close calls. I also feel like there was a lot of events in this series that feels way too convenient and contrived just to force this ending into existence. I didn't want to express this on the comments since there are people who genuinely enjoyed this ending and I didn't want to ruin it for them, but this finale was such a slap in the face for me. I'm glad that I'm not the only one who's unsatisfied with this ending. I probably shouldn't be as affected by this as I am, but I was so fully invested in the original series that its such an insult that everything played out this way. The concept of the telepaths being used as tools would've been such a turn on for me and I was here for it, but even that was executed so badly. The mindscapes, which I repeatedly mentioned was my favorite in this series, felt half assed in the finale as well. So sorry to say that this is not your best work, Swizz. And I don't care if everything gets reversed back in the Mr. Zeiss series, I feel like the damage might be too great for me to continue on in that series. I think I'm done with the Slave Academy universe.
5/15/20, 6:12 PM
I was reading pretty quickly, so it's possible I missed some of the nuances of your story, Swizzington. But one of the things I really liked about the early chapters is how they clearly displayed Lane's character flaws. By the later chapters, however, I felt like you were stacking the deck to get us to sympathize with him and to rationalize his decision (for instance, by highlighting the trauma that Lane's father undergoes after he's freed from mind control). And you should definitely check out Topaz172's "Various Techniques" (https://mcstories.com/VariousTechniques/index.html) and its sequel "Talon's Claws" as soon as possible. It's one of the true classics of the genre!
5/15/20, 6:02 PM
So, James already know about Eunice??? Or did she just tell him today??? You make me wonder if they are already separated or something like that... it was a long wait (well not that long, but still) but it was worthy... 💙💙💙💙 love it, I can't wait for the next day chapter and how Noah will finally react tl everything that happen and learn in the last day :3
Swizzington
5/15/20, 5:51 PM
I have not read the story you referenced, Hypnothrill, but as a general rule I find stories where the guy at the top of the food chain is also under mind control/hypnotic influences to be boring and pointless. Not to say that there is anything wrong with that approach, it just doesn't do anything for me personally :-) Besides, to suggest that Lane is meant to be a "good guy" is to fundamentally misunderstand what's happening here. Better than Todd? Undoubtedly! Entirely benevolent? Obviously not.