Recent Comments

LongtimeFan
1/2/20, 7:47 PM
As others have said, I love the writing and hate Todd. :p You are doing an excellent job at making him a classic narcissist and solipsist ("only he was special"), and I always dislike those characters, especially when they are essentially overpowered and can't be defeated (although here's hoping!). I am eager to see where this goes! And remember--write what YOU want to write, and at least one person will be happy. :) P.S. Does anyone else get weirdly upset when women and especially mothers are mind-controlled in these stories? Or is that a me thing?
Swizzington
1/2/20, 7:14 PM
I did not make a mistake, but perhaps I did not make it clear enough. Barbara is Nathan's aunt and Todd's mother. Todd and Nathan are cousins. Amelia is Chester's mother. Chester and Nathan are not related in anyway, they're just friends. Todd's mother is mentioned but never actually appears in the story. This will probably become clearer later on. When speaking with his mother, Nathan is working under the assumption that Todd's mother has moved to town with him. But this is not the case. Todd is living at Chester's house. Joe will not be lobotomized for much longer, although he will continue to serve Todd in other ways. Ways that require him to act like himself :-)
Anonymous
1/2/20, 6:47 PM
continue, please
nycboot
1/2/20, 6:02 PM
Hi Swizz, your characterization of Todd reminds me of Anthony in "It's a Good Life" (the famous Twilight Zone episode with Bill Mumy as the boy who could will anything). But it's so over-the-top I'm almost numb to any more depravity and horror. I suppose your initial characterization of Joe was intended to be a little disapproving - he's too goody-goody, but it's sure painful remembering what he went through and watching him as a lobotomized human (although you've made it clear that Todd's current power is temporarily). I don't feel that way with Shawn. Hopefully Chester's device will be administered to Todd on setting #3. Also did you make a mistake? Nathan and his mother remembered her sister's name as Barbara, but in Todd's house she's Amelia.
Anonymous
1/2/20, 5:41 PM
Love a series of good dumb twink tfs! Mikey and Matty were the highlights--definitely the best developed of the bunch.
Enslaved
1/2/20, 5:32 PM
New Year, New Chapter Coming?
Jon
1/2/20, 5:05 PM
Man this is getting so good I can't wait for the next one and who it will affect.
UchihaDEMS
1/2/20, 4:48 PM
does that means Nathaniel can turn the tables on him?
guardjangel
1/2/20, 4:47 PM
I love this story so much, keep it up! I really enjoy the different take on the characters and even though I'm usually more interested in the victim's perspective, this story pleasingly surprised me as I enjoy Todd's behavior a lot and what he has in store—he is a really amusing character. I'm really looking forward to the next installment and how Nathan will be involved with Todd.
Swizzington
1/2/20, 3:40 PM
Yeah, I did expect that this story would not be to everyone's taste. Which is why I mentioned at the beginning of chapter 1 I had been anxious to share it :-) But I figure, if even one person enjoys it, then it was probably worth uploading.