Recent Comments

Jul 23, 2019
7/24/19, 3:30 AM
I fixed the pics. The Bobby section is not a leftover. Its purpose was to show the effects of the app. Thanks for the help.
Anonymous
7/24/19, 2:29 AM
just continue. im thinking how this potion will cover or bath the beasts and change them to serve the pharaoh. HAIL PHARAOH!
Jul 23, 2019
7/24/19, 12:55 AM
Hi Kinky, yes, would be nice, this story is a translation, makes things worse as I already thought it threw in German when you know what I mean
Cumluvnbottom@yahoo.com
7/23/19, 11:54 PM
i don't think your giving yourself enough credit. Hell of a story Well done
David S
7/23/19, 11:52 PM
Wonderful story! I can't even decide who should win this battle, the Earthly Pharoah or the demon snake people? You're hitting the "Dark Side" versus the "Darker Side"... excellent writing!!!
Jul 23, 2019
Anonymous
7/23/19, 11:34 PM
The section with Bobby seems to be leftover from an earlier draft
Jul 23, 2019
7/23/19, 11:13 PM
This was hot! Can we see how Paul was changed too?
Jul 23, 2019
7/23/19, 10:59 PM
I really liked the story, but I was frustrated by the gramatical issues. I'm guessing you're not a native english speaker. If you're willing I'd like to take a pass at editing it. Let me know if you're interestred.
Whatalooker0234
7/23/19, 9:50 PM
JJ, apparently administration did not approve my other parts. Why, i do not know. I originally published the entire story in one block and it was approved. Then I got a message that it too long, so I separated the story into parts/chapters. Now it is not approved without an explanation. Sorry!
Jul 23, 2019
Anonymous
7/23/19, 9:50 PM
too bad that there is no picture of him. would love to see what he looks like now