Recent Comments

Symonel
11/25/18, 4:49 PM
Firesix, do you mean to tell me that the notion of the Caravan doesn't get you raging hard, as it comes thrusting towards the border? I'm just playing with you dude. Thank you all for the feedback, it is most appreciated. Also if you have any ideas as to the direction of the story, please do not hesitate to share them. I have multiple ideas floating around in my head concerning where I shall take this story, I'm just going with what feels like the natural progression in my mind, but that doesn't mean I'm not receptive to ideas. I may or may not incorporate them, but they are welcomed, nonetheless. Thanks for the feedback guys. I really do hope to make you all hard. ;) And as a side note, I do have a sense of humor, that I sometimes will subtly write, my initial statement that included the phrase "...be gentle, I’m like a flower.", was a bit of hidden humor that was referencing South Park, when Butters made a music video for youtube called "What, what, in the butt". But, no pun intended from the previous statement, I digress, I shall continue with the story and hope you all keep up the suggestions as well as keep reading. Thanks again!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 4:19 PM
Excellent idea and writing. I read every word from beginning to end. I many times don't do that. Constructive comment: wish the mind control would have been carried on longer to a more resistant cowboy. Keep up the good work. Very promising!!!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 2:48 PM
fascinating twist!
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:52 PM
where is the mind control?
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:49 PM
while the writing is excellent there is no mind control in this story and there is no reprogramming.
Anonymous
11/25/18, 1:43 PM
Excellent story...gets better and better
Anal Assassin
11/25/18, 1:17 PM
Another good chapter. Keep up the good writing. I think they are gonna have have public sex in the park or something like that.
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
11/25/18, 12:48 PM
what will happen to Todd?
Anonymous
11/25/18, 11:51 AM
Tell the story at your own pace. If readers can't get into your character's head then they won't appreciate getting into their pants...
Yvne
11/25/18, 9:11 AM
Interesting premise, but the political commentaries kind of erased any intrigue I might have felt. Boredom took over by the time I read the fifth paragraph, and I just couldn't force myself to read any further. Expressing political views is fine, but when it's done in such a blatant, "in-your-face" manner (at the very start of the story, no less), it significantly slows down the momentum of the story. The idea is genuinely interesting, as I am personally a fan of stories involving magical objects/items. The writing style is also an appropriate choice for this particular type of story. I may eventually come back to this and read it again to completion, but for now, no thanks.