Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/17/17, 4:33 PM
This posting should be highlighted as an example of how a first time writer takes the time to develop a story, work his craft, edit and create a final product. You should be very proud of your effort. How many first-timers do we read that should be embarassed? That is NOT the case with your story. You did very, very well.
Anonymous
4/17/17, 4:22 PM
Interesting!!
Anonymous
4/17/17, 4:21 PM
That was hot!! Loved it.
Willie Cici
4/17/17, 4:20 PM
This posting is the EDITED VERSION with the ending based on the comments votes.
Anonymous
4/17/17, 1:46 PM
Please post part 2 quickly
Anonymous
4/17/17, 9:33 AM
Great first story
Anonymous
4/17/17, 6:13 AM
I loved this whole series and this was a good end to it. The only thing I wish had been different is that we'd have gotten to see Hero transformed before the Goddess's avatar took him. Into a dumb twinky himbo slut or something equally opposite of what he was. Thank you for writing such great stories, Baralai!
Apr 16, 2017
Nick Bottom
4/17/17, 6:02 AM
You can't just stop here, dude. Lol.
Apr 16, 2017
Anonymous
4/17/17, 5:39 AM
Hot. Can't wait for more.
lloyd311@aol.com
4/17/17, 3:16 AM
Glad you enjoyed the story! And yeah, I get that criticism. I'm sorry if you find the cold open "annoying." It wasn't intended to be. That scene was written out of sequence, a long time ago, and I cannot recall exactly what I was thinking at the time. But I always liked that it gave a hint of what the story was going to be about. What Tommy's angst was like. And that it gave some "hotness" before all the necessary set-up that followed. Several of the people I showed the story to before posting it made the same comment, but I still think it works. We'll see. Anyhow, many, many thanks... LLOYD