Recent Comments

Ed
4/14/17, 10:40 PM
Great story!!! Please continue it! Huge biker staches, bushy walrus, inmense handlebars on young guys... the posibilities are endelss... and very erotic! Great work.
Anonymous
4/14/17, 10:15 PM
Love it !!
Sadness
4/14/17, 9:09 PM
The hidden master turned out to be a bit character? Sadness.
Apr 14, 2017
Anonymous
4/14/17, 7:05 PM
Spectacular
4/14/17, 6:09 PM
Sounds very tempting!
Anonymous
4/14/17, 6:07 PM
I dont feel like this story was written by the real baralai, but i could be wrong thou
4/14/17, 3:34 PM
Hugh Michelsen (one of the Site Admin's) here. This story has been years in the making. I am so happy to see it published and available for anyone to read. If you like humiliation and reality warping, you'll definitely like it. Especially if you read those types of stories and find yourself wanting more. At 100,000 words, you definitely won't feel unsatisfied. Also, way to go Lloyd!
Jun 25, 2010
AeonFlux@hotmail.de
4/14/17, 1:56 PM
Perfecly writen.......I need some of that.....can I get it bottled ???
B-anonymous
4/14/17, 12:23 PM
I felt that the ending was ok; but I was left wondering what happened to the other characters left out. Birch, the coach, etc.
Boone
4/14/17, 5:50 AM
Thanks for give it an ending. My favourite chapters were 8 and 9, and all about Hardcore, that was my favourite storyline. The last comment is too harsh for me. I agree that it felts a little bit anticlimatic, and unfocused, but I wouldn't call it "a big dissapointment", in no way. The last chapter was so over the top that you would expect that the whole team was going to pass for really debasing situations, with oversexualised endings (I thought that Frost and Apollo were going to end as dumb street whores, offering themselves in their superhero costumes, or as slaves at the servise of super villains), but that would had been too centered in sex, and not in a plot. It's a good ending, and I'm glad that you've keep Frost alive. I hope you would continue with the spin off that you mentioned in one comment, focused on Hardcore, but I imagine you are somewhat bored of this universe and plan to focus on other worlds, which is something totally comprehensible.