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lloyd311@gmail.com
11/16/16, 3:38 PM
Well, you can be honest without being rude. If someone's trying, and is contributing to this site, they deserve a measure of respect. Old fashioned thinking, I realize...
lloyd311@gmail.com
11/16/16, 3:36 PM
Great so far - looking forward to the rest. Thanks very much for sharing it!
Ruffcub
11/16/16, 12:21 PM
Wow, that was a great start. Can't wait to see where it goes next!
Anonymous
11/16/16, 9:48 AM
Excellent work
Anonymous
11/16/16, 8:33 AM
Can't wait for part 2!!!!
Anonymous
11/16/16, 8:11 AM
Gosh! You are just an amazing writer. How is it you always make it super hot?! Cant wait for the next part!
Anonymous
11/16/16, 6:52 AM
The horrible grammar killed my boner :/
Anonymous
11/16/16, 6:32 AM
First comment wasn't rude. It was honest. Don't confuse the two.
Anonymous
11/16/16, 12:57 AM
The first comment was kinda rude, but if I were you, I would try to images what was happening inside his head - why did it happen? Had Marci done anything to change Keith? Remember: This is your fantasy, and the more detail would be nice to get a further understanding of it.
Anonymous
11/16/16, 12:34 AM
The grammar was pretty bad, but The arc was decent. If you develop more into feelings instead of describing what is happening (or describe with greater detail) it will read a lot better. If this is your first one I commend you on putting content out. Not everyone will like what you write. Learn from it and continue forward.