Recent Comments

Guy
3/13/16, 11:18 PM
Just checked out your tumblr and loved that too haha, keep up the good work!!
Anonymous
3/13/16, 8:13 PM
I loved this a lot. I'm a big fan of foot stuff and braindead hypnosis. More like this please, but maybe with even more about the brainwashing/hypnotizing aspect and how it's working on the guys! Would love to BBall players and guys of different ethnicities (Latino, Black, Asian).
Anonymous
3/13/16, 7:56 PM
If you used MSWord, there is a review function for spelling and grammar/usage. The key to writing is not the original drafting. It's the editing -- constant, numerous, continuous. If you haven't read your own story a dozen times, you're doing yourself a disservice. The story line is hot. Don't let usage and grammar get in the way.
Anonymous
3/13/16, 7:50 PM
Thanks for the new chapter. Loved the first one and this one as well. Last comment is right on -- lycra is hot. Might want to have the players start having contact with the other players. That could be interesting.
Anonymous
3/13/16, 6:49 PM
Hi, Jake Fox. Well, of course I'd like to read more of this story! It stopped in a promising point. After reading all of this suggestions, maybe you could mix some of this suggestions: trashing Rob's expensive suit, and then turn him into a ridiculous parody of himself, with new memories of being bullied by black thugs in high school. I love this story, please don't let it unfinished.
Jake Fox
3/13/16, 5:15 PM
Hi guys I have been really busy with work lately so haven't had the time for more chapters. I am freed up a little now! So I just wanted to know if people want me to continue? Your thoughts............... Thanks
Anonymous
3/13/16, 2:29 PM
If you are looking for a particular fetish to add in, put one (or more) in spandex / lycra. A guy in skintight clothes, where you see everything, (but don't actually see anything) is so hot!
Anonymous
3/13/16, 10:09 AM
this is one of my most favorite types of stories. i love the whole boardgame like jumanji that makes tf's happen, and the people playing just accept it. please continue! it's so hot!
Anonymous
3/13/16, 9:23 AM
"They had both changed into something bigger and better than before and that was enough for now" ... wish it was my turn. I'm glad I found this story again, it's one of my favourites.
Re-educate me
3/13/16, 9:01 AM
Hey, Edlam! Just wanna say I really love your story and can't wait to see the rest! :) As hot as it is, I do kinda hope it has a happy ending for the characters, and maybe Alex gets a taste of his own medicine. Regardless of where you take the story, I look forward to seeing a update soon! Thank you! ^_^