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Anonymous
12/21/15, 12:26 AM
Of course all the stories are 'fiction' & the authors can always write whatever they want, That's not the point...Our comments, are just that: comments to 'aid' the writer if their interested in what has 'turned-on' or been previously enjoyed by the reader. Myself, I prefer the mind-control & hypnosis stories, where a character totally changes the behavior of the other character[s] WITHOUT using any MAGIC...It's just to easy & fancyfull to just rub an amulet or magic rock, etc & have the person become completely different. What made this story more interesting was when we delved into their minds and saw how they rationalized their new behavior, becoming basic'ly a new version of their old self...I think the author really had it going in the earlier chapters with the beginning of JJ's 'transformation', but lost track of this & didn't go far enough in re-developing his 'new' complete Bully persona 100%. Alex also should have 'played-around' more with Jakes self perception. It seems like the author is rushing to bring in the Mother, Father & Girlfriend without having finished with completely redeveloping the three characters he already has on the scene!
Anonymous
12/20/15, 11:05 PM
sorry but i have to laugh at the people who think the invisible thing destroys the reality (how exactly?) but make no mention of a machine that can brainwash people. It's fiction....maybe we should stop being so demanding and let the author write what they want....
Anonymous
12/20/15, 10:17 PM
Honestly I'm hoping that Jake turns the tables by the end of this. As hot as I think this story is, I'm also starting to feel really really really bad for Jake.
Anonymous
12/20/15, 10:08 PM
It appears that Edlam's vacation took his mind off his story [???] causing him to rush it & give the reader a truly mundane sex scene out of a million other lesser stories...If he really wanted to do his readers a favor, Ed should REWRITE this chapter & get rid of all that silly 'invisible' shit , it's destroying the story...In the context of his story, JJ would never revert to his former 'sweet' self, even if only acting to impress Alex & Jake would have been just as perplexed if he'd seen JJ & Alex in a sex act as seeing JJ jacking-off & acting weird. The whole chapter just seemed 'off' & strangely 'rushed' in the context of what had come before...Sorry, but this chapter was a letdown. Here's hoping the author regains his stride in the near future.
Anonymous
12/20/15, 9:54 PM
Hi, EdIam, can you kindly reveal what else male characters will probably show up? I am a little distracted now by only the family part...Hope that we can see more?
Anonymous
12/20/15, 9:53 PM
I have been following this story with great interest, but have to admit, chapter 5 is MY LEAST FAVORITE....It was almost all a long fairly common sex scene...I agree 100% with the comment [18:08] & all this invisable Alex stuff is just plane silly, destroying the whole realistic premise of the re-educator..A lot of 'sex' does not in itself make a story 'sexier': What WAS SO HOT IN THE PREVIOUS CHAPTERS was how the characters mind was altered & how they rationalized their new behavior...There should have been a much longer build-up to sex between JJ & Jake...I would have enjoyed a day or two of further changes in JJ : how he now acts different, his walk [swagger ?], his manner's [or lack thereof], his new choice of wardrobe [tight, sexy, reveling ], his new habits [smoking, anyone?]...Then it would be time to start changing each family members relation's to him & each other..I feel the phone call was a big mistake. We should have seen the family reactions when they arrived home & how Alex would have solved them, one by one.....PLEASE CUT OUT ALL THIS INVISIBLE STUFF, IT'S SILLY & DESTROY'S THE WHOLE REALISTIC BASIS FOR THE STORY !!!!
Anonymous
12/20/15, 9:27 PM
Always supports you, Edlam, no matter what. This is your novel. And I, as a voracious but faithful reader, will simply follow you to the end of the story lol
EdIam
12/20/15, 8:49 PM
Sorry this isn't everyone's cup of tea! Hopefully something in the previous chapters really got you excited! My advice, stick to that and get enjoyment out of it. Some people may enjoy this darker chapter for their own reasons. And, well, there's more to come that you may enjoy. Everything isn't going to be everyone's preference, especially in a sub-genre with so many different levels of interest. Some want simple mind control, some want complete domination. If you're giving up on the story at this point, that's cool. I hope there was something in there in previous chapters that got you excited! I'm gonna keep taking the story where I want it to go because, in the end, it's gotta turn me on before I even think about submitting it. Thanks again, everyone, for your input!! Love the amount of discussion my story has caused!
Anonymous
12/20/15, 8:25 PM
This story has taken such a dark turn I dont want to continue reading it
Anonymous
12/20/15, 7:28 PM
Alex's nature takes away any interest in the story. It's not love of control or sex it's just violence