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8/30/24, 8:46 AM
Recently re-read all of "personal toy" and this. You really have some of the best writing on the site.:green_heart: Very emotional, very well-detailed, quite sexy. Superb!:smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
8/29/24, 9:26 PM
Really touching tribute, very well-written.:green_heart:

8/30/24, 8:34 AM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Thank you Blobby 💜
8/29/24, 10:01 PM
And then Kaa gives birth to a mowgli naga :grin:

8/30/24, 8:34 AM
@[Norismo](/user/show/2849185) BAHAHAHAHA NORISMO
8/30/24, 4:53 AM
I’m really loving this story. I’m following Ray and Nick as our main characters, but I’m kinda curious who the hell Victor is? I’m sure it’s been established in the story, but right near the end I want to know. Is he one of the freshmen? A senior? It’s kinda hits different depending on who it is. (And Tbh, I want him to be a freshman, because it’s hotter that he gambled and didn’t get that long before he became an object.)

8/30/24, 7:47 AM
@[KinkyNickInSea](/user/show/17305) He's one of the Daedalus freshmen, yes. I tried to sprinkle their names into the story every now and then instead of doing one big introduction round for everyone. Maybe I should have done that though, haha.

8/30/24, 8:29 AM
@[Cockatrice](/user/show/620105) oh, no need to do an introduction round. Perhaps just drop a little reminder near the end? “There stood a freshman, Victor, …”
8/29/24, 8:54 AM
Sexy! Though, I am really getting confused with the spiral. In the original Corduroy story, he/it cale as a person/thing with a physical location that was acting throught hacking phones and sending nanites-infested objects. In your ealiest chapters, the Spiral definitively gave "rogue AI" vibes, confused by human concepts and extremely tech-based (it's not too difficult to presume the objects pulled out of backpack is some kind of 3D print thing, especially if those are supposed to have the same effect as the sperm. Some kind of nanotechnologie, perhaps.) But in the most recent chapters, especially here, The Spiral comes off as a supernatural reality warper who can influence anyone, and create anything out of thin air. And now, object teleportation? I mean, we never got an explanation, so it's not that big of a deal, but when it feels the Spiral can pull off stuff it/he was never hinted to have begore, it kind of ruin any tension. And it makes one wobder just WHY did the Spiral need the slaves to spread manually. Is the Spiral growing stronger the more people it has under His power? Because I don't feel it was made that clear.😕

8/29/24, 9:51 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Thanks for reading so far and for your comment. Who or what the Spiral is is something jockboi and I have discussed. You have a point that my take on the Spiral is far different than jockboi's original story or his rewrite and I think that as I have written and discussed things with jockboi I have a better understanding of my version of the Spiral and that may be where you're picking up on the changes that are occurring over the narrative. There are two chapters left in this arc, but I may try to incorporate your point in the final chapter and try to make things a bit clearer. But there is an idea to explain who/what the Spiral is in a separate arc; once I finish this arc up, I'd like to get your thoughts and maybe that arc will be the next thing to work on.

8/30/24, 8:02 AM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) Okay!:thumbsup:
MJPtothelimit
8/29/24, 9:30 PM
The story is well written. The pace seems slow, yet it has only been 24 hours. The bondage is good. I would have expected the brit to experience a few more items in the dungeon. The safe word use has some issues. It would be good to see the boy enticed more, unless Dylan really lives in the mansion. What is his relationship with the professor?

8/30/24, 8:00 AM
@MJPtothelimit Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate it and will take it on board, but allow me to explain my point of view. I This story is based on a roleplay I did and I found it so hot at the time that I decided to make a story on it. I try to sell it specifically with very few changes unless absolutely necessary. As for pacing, the story if I decided to tell it all would be a very long one. Like, I am talking 80 chapters. Sure I could edit it down, but I wouldn’t know where to begin and the last thing I want is to give this story, an injustice if that makes sense. Again, really glad you enjoyed!
8/30/24, 7:23 AM
this is so hot. I can't wait to read more!
Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
8/30/24, 5:45 AM
I think Middle Eastern men are the hottest in the world. and there is nothing I like to be more than a slutty gurl for a Real Man. This is such a hot hot story. Hope there is more.
Aug 29, 2024
8/30/24, 4:40 AM
Dad transformation is soooo hot.
Anonymous
8/30/24, 3:29 AM
Great story! I'm so hard just stroking my leaky dong to this.