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Vikingar
4/27/22, 11:27 PM
Taking up the ideas already revealed in the story, he is "Good, but not perfect" yet! So more changes are to come, probably a new hairstyle and tattoos on hands and neck that can't be hidden , e.g. "CHAV LIFE" fits across 8 fingers or below his ear(s). Some piercings too, to add to his discomfort as he is transformed to the cop's perfect "Chav." The fact the cop might want to make him "Perfect" suggests he has plans for him and might want to keep him in some way. Is he really at the cop shop, or was the message asking the officer to return a recording played at the right time to lull him into a false sense of security? To keep up with the Cop's scene he needs to be cuffed before he can get out from the back of the car and then he's taken into the building through a back entrance. Is it really a cop-shop or is it something else? Is he drugged and then hypnotised so he thinks the scallies he saw in the area are his mates (where did they come from?) There's loads of mileage in this plot from where you stopped. It's certainly worth another couple of instalments before he becomes the cop's Chav Boi.
4/27/22, 11:18 PM
I like how the hypno comes from Preston's pov, meaning we see it from the guy doing the controlling. It being followed by us seeing Justin's obedience was hot. So yeah this was sexy.
4/27/22, 10:36 PM
So hot and so sweet! Loved it, great job.
4/27/22, 9:51 PM
❗W🤩W❗ I 💖 the detail in this story. It looks like Jack & Eric will be 😘HAPPY😘 4 the rest of their lives👍 A gr8 story & I'm looking 4ward 2 reading the next chapter's 📖🤓📖
4/26/22, 11:30 PM
If I’m brutally honest, I actually expected something more subversive - eg. the blindness would make Corey immune and a bigger challenge for Jason whose over reliance on the strength of his musk made him lazy and conceited. It could have even progressed into Corey turning the tables on Jason and make him his bitch - or dominate him from the power bottom or small Dom big sub perspective. Alternatively, Jason would rise to the challenge and win Corey’s affections or even submission by other means - just not by his strength or his musk. But this is your story - and it works. The bully wins - which I’m never a fan of - but it’s not an “unpleasant win”, due to the kind of afterword you did. The sex scenes seemed enjoyable for both at least. Minor thing, but I noticed a few typos or almost “autocorrect mistakes”? Was this typed on a phone? Either way, one more read - or maybe a read-through from a proof-reader - would make this a flawless experience.

4/27/22, 7:10 AM
@Delicious1papaya I'm sorry haha, but I stick to the "social roles" in my stories, although my doms and bullies are (almost) always kind and caring deep down. Regarding the mistakes, my Word seemes to not like big documents so it eventually lets some things pass, even when I review it a second time on the story builder itself. I'm sorry, I'll pay more attention next time!

4/27/22, 7:28 AM
@Twan Andersen Don’t worry too much about the typos - they were just a minor distraction. I remembered one more thing: Corey doesn’t stand out enough - maybe that is why I expected some subversion? In the end he adheres to the expected roles, Jason isn’t really “blindsided” - so maybe it’s the initial blurb that confused me? Otherwise it’s a very nice story! I enjoy reading stories featuring heightened perception of smell or taste, so please keep writing them! 😊

4/27/22, 9:48 PM
@Twan Andersen The fact that Jason was kind and caring deep down absolutely made the story for me.
Rubber_Lover14
4/27/22, 8:58 PM
This is fantastic. I can't wait to see what happens in part two. I wonder if Conner will realise what's going on, and use it to his advantage
4/27/22, 8:34 PM
I hoped it wouldn't end where it did. I enjoyed the story very much. A few English errors that made understanding a hit and miss between one or three ideas, but good none the less!
4/27/22, 8:27 PM
Oh? THAT was easy. Justin seems to be a good boy
4/27/22, 7:54 PM
Thank you guys!
4/27/22, 6:33 PM
Ah, the true perk of being an approver is I get to read hot work like this before everyone else. Just amazing stuff all around.