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9/22/21, 4:05 AM
Since this is the 4th edition of "Sexuality," I'm wondering we'll get a prequel/sequel with the 1st-3rd/5th edition :) *crosses fingers*
9/22/21, 3:32 AM
i was JUST lamenting that there wasn't any SERIOUSLY GOOD drone stuff being posted up lately and you grace us with another installment of this WONDERFUL universe. UGH, thank you.
9/21/21, 6:06 PM
This was really nicely written -- hot, kept up the pacing, delivered on the exposition of the world. Great work! I look forward to more!

9/22/21, 1:07 AM
@time.to.occur Hey, I really appreciate that! I worked hard on the pacing and I’m glad I kept it hot. I’m also glad the exposition worked out—I wanted to keep things readable without revealing everything, but also providing what readers really needed. I hope to deliver with the next chapters!
9/20/21, 6:59 PM
I wanted a happy ending...😢 Very well written, its a good mystery/horror story. Like you said above, its in a similar vein to ScreamingMoist, who is one of my favorite authors on here, so good job. Reminds me of a Goosebumps book where a mirror turned you invisible, but if you used it too long you were replaced by your mirror version. I like the moral and think you actually could have been more anvilicious with the narrator coming back to tell us what we just learned, but that's a preference and not a critique. "I know writers who use subtext and they're all cowards." Keep up the good work, and i look forward to more trips to "The Rainbow Zone".

9/20/21, 9:10 PM
Heh - yeah, I should probably mention that the Rainbow Zone stories will almost invariably have a dark twist at the end. I'm a dickhead like that sometimes. Not gonna lie - I was thinking about that Goosebumps book when I wrote this. I'm glad someone else can see those fingerprints on it. That book scared the heck out of me as a kid. Goosebumps in general were just a little too scary for me, but they've also worked their way into my subconscious and have influenced my kinks more than I'd like to admit. I actually meant to write another Serling scene at the end, but apparently I totally forgot. Whoops. I'll get him next time. If Serling were to show up, he'd want to remind you that though we lust for muscle and sex, but what matters most extends far below the surface. Without real human connection, we're left as hollow men, stepping endlessly through... The Rainbow Zone.

9/20/21, 9:23 PM
@Derek Williams I also thought about that goosebumps book when I was reading this! It was called "Let's Get Invisible!" And the ending where Max's brother Lefty is throwing the ball right-handed, so we know that his reflection escaped... :0

Nutiper
9/21/21, 12:31 AM
@Derek Williams AH. I literally popped online to comment on this story, and I was going to mention the Goosebumps book too — I *love* that a bunch of us immediately went "oh my god, that book..." when we read this? Derek just grabbing us by our nostalgia-brains... I loved that aspect about this story, honestly. Like, what a damn creative and intriguing way to play with the idea, and pull it into a horror-smut combo? Plus the pacing so well done, I think you *really* nailed it with this story. And that moment when he realizes that *Kyle isn't Kyle* is... whew. Chilling, and fantastic.

9/21/21, 7:59 AM
Man… wait til you guys find out another influence on this story was Mary Kate and Ashley Olson’s “Double Double Toil and Trouble.”

Nutiper
9/21/21, 8:30 AM
@Derek Williams Okay so I looked up what I think is the relevant clip on Youtube ( https://youtu.be/LuXRGBU5eog?t=143 I think?) and, as an influence, this is actually hilarious and *fantastic*. Mary-Kate and Ashley would be proud...

9/21/21, 3:10 PM
Heh… those special effects really don’t hold up. I wasn’t specifically thinking of that scene, but the whole movie is a ‘trapped in the mirror’ plot.

Nutiper
9/21/21, 8:05 PM
@Derek Williams Well, you know what they say... "Mary-Kate and Ashley *walked* so that Derek Williams could *run*." (Also I kinda love shoestring-budget special effects! Maybe it's the nostalgia factor for me.)

9/22/21, 1:00 AM
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9/21/21, 5:14 PM
That was hot. I didn't expect the twist at the end. I don't think I could have passed up the chance at a bigger cock even if I did freak out. In Jake's "prison" does he get to look into the mirror and see his replacement fucking "Kyle" with a bigger cock? He gets all the soulless ass he wants to stick his average sized dick in but does he wander what if?

9/22/21, 12:59 AM
Thanks @TexMuscle! The Jake-thing doesn’t end up with a bigger cock, because he didn’t copy one from anyone. Tragically, Jake’s locked away completely with no way back. Maybe he’ll break free in time, but I doubt it.
9/22/21, 12:50 AM
Very well done! You covered a great amount of details in the room, the light and wood panel - i could envision the rooms and training center. I loved the build up and the twists of who hired Mr Anderson and why. But what really got me going was the twist of Mr Tang confronting Jason and the simi-hypnotic state, that was awesome. Really cool how Mr Tang forcefully said he's not paying jason's fees and told Anderson he addressed Jason's escort service with the boy ;) - Love to ready more about the Rugby Captain...
Anonymous
9/22/21, 12:35 AM
This is so good! I love the induction and Kazuma's resistance and eventual downfall. The mix-up of him/ her didn't bother me much. Hope you make chapter 2!!
9/22/21, 12:26 AM
The last scene really nails the balance between sweet and hot! I loved it!
Anonymous
9/22/21, 12:24 AM
Great story and very hot but imho Amir is coming off as a jerk. Maybe he should get his comeuppance before it all ends? ;)
9/22/21, 12:14 AM
great start. cant wait for the next chapter