Recent Comments

Mesi
11/30/15, 4:04 AM
To be frank, I had written myself into a corner. I wanted Jake to, in the end, 'give up' his control having learned a valuable and steamy lesson. But I also wanted a big sexy climax. Personally, I was no longer invested in the story enough to extend the series longer than it had been. I couldn't think of any way to do so without being contrived or extending the story a few more parts after the climax. Endings are always a weakpoint for me. Its something I am working on improving. At this time, I just want to move onto different stories. Also; small correction, everyone is legal age. Jake is 18, and Greg is 19 (he was held back a year).
Anonymous
11/30/15, 2:34 AM
One of the HOTTEST episodes yet! Keep up the good work!
Anonymous
11/30/15, 1:41 AM
Loved this part! So happy to have Jimmy involved in the humiliation.
Anonymous
11/30/15, 1:19 AM
Philip, let Jimmy record Brody
Anonymous
11/29/15, 10:25 PM
Brilliant. Coach should lend this slut to a biker gang to use and abuse.
Anonymous
11/29/15, 6:53 PM
Cont. Don't get me wrong, I like your story a lot. You generated a very interesting and humorous interactions between unintended recipients and the underage protagonist, which is rare in MC stories. I want to see more of your creations coming in the future.
Anonymous
11/29/15, 6:43 PM
The last scene was nice, but I feel the ending is a little abrupt. As in, Jake enjoyed what he has, "I can get used to this," but then there's a sudden change of heart. The reversal of slave conditioning was also too quick and straightforward, which contradicts to the mood build up via lengthy exposure. Arthur and Darren disappear off the radar, I wonder what happened to them? I think a better way to end this, aside from lengthening the process to smooth out the change, is to describe how Jake has no way to reverse the conditioning but he is decent enough to work himself against the temptation. He struggles everyday to NOT be the master to his slaves or spreading his influences, but occasionally he'd still give in to it, this way it continues to have potential for humorous interactions that's consistent with the rest of the story, expressed Jake's decency through action instead of words alone, and makes him more 'human'; mental struggle is part of our existence, and I think it especially shines (both from the slave and from the master) in a mind control story.
Cordyceps Sinensis
11/29/15, 4:58 PM
Love your series and I'm so happy to see you're continuing it. Would love to collab sometime, you work excellent detail into the boy's perspective, it's a lot of fun. :)
Jon
11/29/15, 8:39 AM
Double penetration is HOT! Brody is really getting bitched out. Can't wait for Jimmy to join in.
Nick Bottom
11/29/15, 5:08 AM
Excellent work as always, Philip!!