Recent Comments

Anonymous
10/27/15, 9:55 PM
Great muscle descriptions! Story/narrative gets a bit jumbled at the end, since you are trying to resolve the original "2 guys from Boston" story along with Dr. Hart and his muscle boy club and then Damien and his demons....lot of plot threads here. Maybe some editing to sort things into distinct story lines would help. It is becoming a bit "stream of consciousness" and confusing to follow at the end.
Anonymous
10/27/15, 9:18 PM
Well written and the flashback was well executed. However, wasn't he interrupting the narrator? Was the narrator going to tell him that he made him break up with his girl friend -- or did that just "happen"? Intriguing.
Anonymous
10/27/15, 3:26 PM
Please write more of these. It seems like a wonderful series. All of the things I find most arousing in one story!
Anonymous
10/27/15, 3:24 PM
Excellent go at a story! I appreciate the fantasy and execution of it. More description in the climax(pun intended) would have made this even stronger. Can't wait to see your continued entries.
Anonymous
10/27/15, 11:48 AM
Love the continuation of this series. I can't wait to read more
rubberay4
10/27/15, 11:08 AM
love this story...the women help how much the men are being changed...very hot
Oct 7, 2015
Viridian
10/27/15, 5:49 AM
Good story. I especially liked the buildup where all possibility of sympathy for Jeremy is neatly stripped away. Also, Kirkman's attitude: "Not really." Are you planning to continue with this?
Viridian
10/27/15, 5:43 AM
I liked it. Written well enough and the fantasy was fun. It could have used some more description about events, expressions, the victim's confusion and especially about the thoughts of the narrator. I hope you continue writing here.
Anonymous
10/27/15, 4:42 AM
Thanks for all your good work Mesi. It's a fun read and seems to get dirtier ^_^ I appreciate your taste in men too :D
Mesi
10/27/15, 3:49 AM
Funny someone mentioned being a 6 parter. When I started writing this chapter, it was intended to be the finale. It was only half way through I changed it as I realized if I wanted to end it properly without being rushed I needed to drag the story out more than what I was comfortable in a single chapter. Basically, the aside at Geoffery/Greg's house was running long and I don't like trimming out good things ;) So at the moment, the length of the series is indeterminate. But at least 1 more chapter is coming, that's for sure.