Recent Comments

4/17/23, 10:41 AM
Amazing chapter. Just what I hoped for. So hot to see Jake and Josh play along to ensnare their friend, slipping up here and there because they just can not hide their new desires. Much hotter than if Cedric had just used a memory wipe on them. That would have been boring. Also great to see Jake and Josh explore their filmmaking dreams. I'm sure they will soon be making movies that make this one seem very tame in comparison. My only nitpick is with the pizza guy. It did not seem natural for him to join the others so readily on his own. He should have somehow been exposed to the subliminals before deciding to stay.

4/21/23, 5:21 PM
@[Lytcom](/user/show/602531) Thanks! I fixed the part with the pizza guy. I thought originally that the appeal of an unreleased computer game would be enough, but he's shy, and surely a minimum cautious.

4/21/23, 9:35 PM
@[Mafisto](/user/show/600927) Oh wow, thanks. I did not imagine you would change the story for my little nitpick. It works much better now. Leaving him in the foyer listening to the music while pretending to search for a credit card makes it much more believable.
4/22/23, 4:46 PM
Still waiting a part 2 here - great job on this.
Anonymous
4/22/23, 4:01 PM
hot transformation of Rick and loved how the relationship with Jack flipped at the end… wish there was more of their story…
Nov 22, 2012
4/22/23, 7:44 AM
It's amazing how much feeling you evoked in me in such a short story. Really well written and terrifying and hot all at once.

4/22/23, 3:21 PM
@[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) Thanks for taking the time to comment. Glad you enjoyed it.
4/22/23, 2:52 PM
Sorry but this is only gonna be a solo chapter, not a series. My last series took so long and so much effort, I wanted to make a quickie this time. :sweat_smile:
4/22/23, 1:26 PM
Enjoy where this is going...
4/22/23, 12:48 PM
I hope there’s more coming because it was anticlimactic.
4/21/23, 8:10 PM
Excellent start.

4/22/23, 11:40 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) Thank you :grinning:
liketoo
8/26/20, 2:33 PM
i love to read more of this stories , Please give us part 2

Anonymous
4/22/23, 9:28 AM
@liketoo I don’t think there’ll be another
Martin
4/22/23, 5:51 AM
Now, this story made me really hard. It's wicked and I hope there'll be an unexpected turn of events down the line, but it's still really hot. It would be hotter if the guys would regain some of their awareness at some point... realizing what has become of them!