Recent Comments

10/21/20, 1:36 PM
Love your work! Your detailed descriptions are hot and understandable even to non-gamers. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Anonymous
10/21/20, 11:12 AM
Absolutely amazing. This is such a great story. Perfectly paced and masterful exposition - I feel like I'm in the story with them. Cannot wait to read more!
10/21/20, 10:41 AM
i love it!! cant wait for more!! was hayden aware he fucked himself for 12 hrs? can we see his reaction?
Anonymous
10/21/20, 10:34 AM
Omg this story is so hot. Would be amazing to follow Luke, for a whole day. His “sickness” getting worse. Him being around his brother, Manny, the coach, other boys on his team....
10/21/20, 9:57 AM
welcome back
10/21/20, 9:34 AM
This is very hot. What happened to the other fighters?
Evan
10/21/20, 7:47 AM
Very imaginative use of the book. Thanks for writing. Hope to see more experimentation.
hypnosub
10/21/20, 4:54 AM
everyone in the comments has said it already, but wow this story is truly phenomenal! i've read pretty much all of your dumbing down stories and this one takes the cake - which is an impressive feat given the stuff you've written. this is such a clever way to use the dumbing down kink and to reimagine it in a way that's fun to read but also interesting to analyze (unlike kyle, who probably can't analyze anything now lol). this is seriously an amazing story and if there was a gay erotica award you would deserve it!
10/21/20, 4:09 AM
this chapter was so good. i really enjoy mr brady enjoying a golden shower.
10/21/20, 3:55 AM
Wow, what a long chapter. :) Now, don't get me wrong, this is great, its just that due to its length I am going to need a few days to actually take it all in. So expect a longer comment later on. That said, the idea of Dennis in the game is awesome. I love how he is blatent and yet not, in such a way that Jese thinks nothing of it. I also like the clothing, especially the fact that Dennis can see Jese's ass, that's a nice touch. Hope lots of moments occur that lead to groping and fingering and maybe butt near face, with Jese coming to like it from Dennis more and more. While the other NPCs were cool, and I like how Jese wants to save the two, I like Dennis in it more. That's all I have so far, will need to read more. Awesome so far. :)