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9/10/20, 11:46 AM
Points to you for using the negative space between lines to create pacing, solid story work as well. I've done hypnosis and in my experience text based hypnosis doesn't do much for me. Still, story well written, best of luck to you in the contest!
Ravenclaw
9/10/20, 9:31 AM
that was really good. cant wait for more.
9/10/20, 9:12 AM
I've been working on it every chance I got and the first chapter should be up soon as long as September doesn't become concentrated 2020 like August did. I had so many people who needed my help and so much that needed to be done that I could only get the time to work on this infrequently. Thanks for the offer but the editing is the thing that has been giving me the least problems. The biggest bottleneck has been my decision to divide up the first day into multiple chapters. Some scenes are easy to place but I keep changing my mind on which others should be placed where in between them. The first day is going to be 3 to 5 chapters depending on exactly which order I end up deciding on. My brain also gave me an idea for the pandemic challenge so I will need to devote more time to it this month due to the deadline. I will be publishing the first (and maybe second) chapter(s) before I switch over to it though. Can't work on a new challenge while this unholy monster still haunts my nightmares after all.
JuG
9/10/20, 8:29 AM
excellent!
Mark
9/10/20, 7:27 AM
Can't wait for the last part!
9/10/20, 6:15 AM
It's an interesting conflict that I hope comes up again. Telling Dave to stop would only draw more attention to them, but it would be the right thing to do.
Anonymous
9/10/20, 6:04 AM
I live to serve the virus
9/10/20, 5:53 AM
I live to serve the virus
giveintothemusk
9/10/20, 5:29 AM
What a twist! Been such a great series. 😊👍
9/10/20, 5:19 AM
Nice, I love big men fall as victims, turned into bottom of less manly or big ones lol Perhaps the 3rd suggestion was a bit too much in my opinion, something along the lines with "will ask Dan for relaxation" or "take more pills" so he can make him watch more would work better with your intention or was it like this so Dan can see if some order can be challenged?