Recent Comments

1/13/20, 12:36 AM
I think the way Jeremiah and Hunter's personalities came across is done well! I think the fact that people are having strong reactions to those characters is testament to the author's writing. Looking forward to a second chapter! It does feel like Jeremiah will be getting comeuppance at some point but who knows? :)
Anonymous
1/12/20, 10:48 PM
A great concept, but I must admit it felt like the execution faltered somewhat. As bizarre as it is say this about a written piece of work, but I think this would’ve benefitted from the principle of “show me, don’t tell me”. It feels like we’re hearing about Yiannis’ journey without ever really experiencing it, which somewhat devalues the journey
Aquarius
1/12/20, 9:00 PM
This story is sooo good!! I can’t wait to see more of it!
1/12/20, 8:51 PM
Hmm, well I think the main character does have issues because of the way he thinks. Maybe I need to make that more clear.
Anonymous
1/12/20, 8:16 PM
I agree with Shadow’s comment, Mr. Kent should propose to his master. Preferably when they’re in the airport getting ready to escape to Europe together.
Plague
1/12/20, 7:11 PM
Great to see your writing again and this latest chapter was great as well.
1/12/20, 5:57 PM
love this!
nycboot
1/12/20, 5:38 PM
Lotsa fun!
Anonymous
1/12/20, 4:43 PM
This is so unique and creative, I can't wait for more!
Egg
1/12/20, 2:39 PM
i love this story but could you make him chip the dad??