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5/4/20, 11:56 PM
Very good and hot story !!!
5/4/20, 11:23 PM
Fantastic story line with all the details to make to most interesting and erotic to read. Really enjoyed you thoughtfulness and creativity. You make the characters come alive with all the details and frustrations that they endure. Found myself thinking about this story often as it was a leisurely read over a couple of days. Thanks!
5/4/20, 9:12 PM
I'm rooting for you and your story as a fellow up and coming writer, hence my comments. Glad I can be of some help.
May 4, 2020
5/4/20, 9:04 PM
It wasn't really a mind control story, more of a body control one. The antagonist was still aware of what he was doing, only powerless against it. Perhaps Nate will perfect the device in the future and gain the ability to change his subjects' thought processes. The Japanese love these square watermelons. They encase growing melons in plastic molds and the melon eventually grows to take up the shape of the mold. If you get my drift. ;)
5/4/20, 8:47 PM
love what your did with the triggers. very hot man cant wait for more parts
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5/4/20, 8:28 PM
Awesome chapter. I hope our guy gets a cyborg compensation when the military takes his brother. Thanks for writing !
5/4/20, 8:28 PM
Superb! I really enjoyed it! Jacob's anxiety felt very real and the reasons behind are very well introduced all through the story. Dr. Wellington's authoritative yet reassuring tone sounded professional and wicked at the same time. And just like contagious yawning, I felt like masturbating every time I read "I need to masturbate" lol Simple and effective!! Kudos for the story. Also, I wouldn't mind reading more about this. It feels like it's meant to have a follow-up.
5/4/20, 8:26 PM
Hmmm that's yet another good point haha. I will think about what I can add to flesh this out a bit. Thank you for your criticism! I love it haha!
5/4/20, 7:49 PM
any sequels or continuations available?
5/4/20, 7:29 PM
Incredible story! Love the strange magic in the air--and, of course, the stupefication and muscle growth. Wooo!