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4/23/23, 1:37 AM
I I almost never review middle chapters. That being said, this was the single most hottest chapter I have ever read. Holy fuck! Muscle stuff, poppers, mind control/fucking. Military. Wow! This was just amazing!
4/22/23, 11:39 PM
The suspense is killing me! I'm eager for the next chapter!
4/22/23, 6:43 PM
This one really snuck up on me. The three levels of hypnotic subjects was completely unexpected, and even rather hard to believe you really meant what I thought i was reading. Maybe even more convoluted as my name is also David. Very hot!
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4/22/23, 5:33 PM
this story gets hotter and hotter…
4/21/23, 9:37 PM
This was great! Dark... But great!

4/22/23, 5:32 PM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) I appreciate it! That is my aspiration here :)
4/22/23, 2:57 AM
I like this story; it's tapping into the legacy of Westworld. There are the tones of Futureworld in the original storyline and the most recent arc of the HBO version. I can see something much darker than Beaner because of those two stories and the darkness they put into the copies of people they make. But I want to see where you take this story and how the AI copies will work into the larger plans.

4/22/23, 5:31 PM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) Thanks again! This time I've decided not to make the big, bad company into sinister villains. They're coldhearted and ruthless in their treatment of their otherwise fully sentient AIs, but they aren't on some sort of power-trip towards world domination. That said, they aren't the only players in this game,...
4/22/23, 11:31 AM
Great story, which brings me to the recently very popular chatgpt. I'd love to see more of the story develop with Kevin's copy, or if the real Kevin gets into the game again, what happens to them if he and the fictional Kevin meet again, I'm curious.

4/22/23, 5:23 PM
@[GoJia](/user/show/23538) Glad you're enjoying things! There's certainly going to be some of what you've mentioned coming up, so I hope you like it!
4/17/23, 10:41 AM
Amazing chapter. Just what I hoped for. So hot to see Jake and Josh play along to ensnare their friend, slipping up here and there because they just can not hide their new desires. Much hotter than if Cedric had just used a memory wipe on them. That would have been boring. Also great to see Jake and Josh explore their filmmaking dreams. I'm sure they will soon be making movies that make this one seem very tame in comparison. My only nitpick is with the pizza guy. It did not seem natural for him to join the others so readily on his own. He should have somehow been exposed to the subliminals before deciding to stay.

4/21/23, 5:21 PM
@[Lytcom](/user/show/602531) Thanks! I fixed the part with the pizza guy. I thought originally that the appeal of an unreleased computer game would be enough, but he's shy, and surely a minimum cautious.

4/21/23, 9:35 PM
@[Mafisto](/user/show/600927) Oh wow, thanks. I did not imagine you would change the story for my little nitpick. It works much better now. Leaving him in the foyer listening to the music while pretending to search for a credit card makes it much more believable.
4/22/23, 4:46 PM
Still waiting a part 2 here - great job on this.