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11/27/25, 10:20 PM
Love it

11/27/25, 10:33 PM
@[thejazzcat](/user/show/10005285) Hehe! Cheers :3
11/27/25, 10:13 PM
This great fun! Keep it up!
11/27/25, 6:33 PM
Loved it!!! Very cool take on JohnSmith's story (and he is one of my favorite writers on the site)
11/27/25, 5:55 PM
Holy shit. You weren't kidding about angst incoming!
11/27/25, 2:44 PM
Definitely looking forward to more of this.
11/27/25, 1:01 AM
Great story arc) I liked it with an open ending 👍

11/27/25, 10:33 AM
@[Zander-1](/user/show/10015044) Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it :) I started writing this as a quick one-shot when the idea got in my head, but there are three more chapters in the whole story (since I didn't get to the more raunchy stuff in part one). They should all pop out in the next week-and-a-bit.
Anonymous
3/28/19, 2:15 AM
I'd probably be a Darius or the Third option. But anyway, The sudden change of focus was a bit jarring. The start was completely transitioned well but then it was lost at the time Brody became the focus. It's a minor thing. But bad writing is a turn off for me... Which thankfully isn't common in this site.

11/27/25, 7:51 AM
@Anonymous I know this story is 6 years old. but here we go anyway .... it's quite a rich irony that you think you'd be. a darius when you're literally throwing bossy bottom shade. The bad writing comment is another "bless your heart" moment... his writing is actually decent. Perhaps you don’t understand the difference between "writing" and "creativity" and it says a lot about you that you'd comment anonymously to bitch about someone selves creative choice just because it didn’t press your bitch button the right way. IF you'd ever put yourself out there like that then you wouldn't have taken the time to shit all over someone else's hard work. Hope you're not still "that guy" today
11/27/25, 7:48 AM
Well, at least Jamie's rather surprising resistance and anger from the last chapter is explained. But ...... I'll wait for the next to see.
Arachnus The Spider
3/28/19, 2:42 AM
I thought I was being pretty equitable between the two men. *shrug* I welcome the criticism, but as for bad writing, you would need to be more specific. Otherwise it's impossible to address. I did go ahead and threw the end digression out because I sensed that might have to do with it. It was self-indulgent, I know. But all of this is. Update should reflect the change soon.

11/27/25, 7:39 AM
@Arachnus The Spider "Anonymous" up there was just being pissy for no reason. Your writing is quite good. What he's calling bad writing is "bossy brat not getting exactly what he wants" ... "I know this story and comment thread is years old, but just hate when people try to tear someone else down just to make themselves feel superior
11/27/25, 6:45 AM
This is one of my most favorite stories ever. Can’t wait to see what’s next.