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hopeless romantic
11/25/25, 5:56 AM
gosh, it probably hurt Jamie to hear Archie say that he hated him a bit too. They hopefully can cuddle up and make up for all the lost time, all under Master's care. but I hope that they can defeat Dauntless before this
11/25/25, 5:13 AM
Excellent stuff!

11/25/25, 5:32 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it :)
11/25/25, 5:30 AM
Great story.
11/25/25, 1:31 AM
I really enjoyed this story; it's clear you put a lot of work into it. I'd love to read more of your stories or a sequel to this one.

11/25/25, 4:45 AM
@[Zander-1](/user/show/10015044) Thanks so much for the feedback. I’m glad you enjoyed it. It was a lot more work than I thought trying to edit it all but for a first attempt I’m happy with it. I’ve got more ideas for the soothing gooner to have interactions with the other characters so I hope you enjoy those too.
11/25/25, 3:40 AM
Another amazing chapter!
11/25/25, 3:14 AM
Oh my. What a place to leave us. Our first actual look at Dauntless, and it's this. Quite the Chapter, you’ve given us here, @NeonDemon. Somehow, our intrepid heroes will escape Dauntless' and the League's clutches, but how? Maybe Master will bring out Goliath to distract Dauntless long enough for Jamie and Dusk to be extracted? Maybe Jamie's power will do it? Can't wait to see. Personally, I hope that Dauntless ends up as DS-014. Given what he's made of the League, he deserves that fate so, so much. There's a lot to unpack in a chapter that starts slowly, but builds and builds to a big climax. My favorite moment was where Master manipulates Dusk to calm him and then again a few moments later to remind him of his duties. It's a neat little insight into a couple of more ways Master can control his drones. And I really love that Archie willingly submitted himself to this level of control. Then there's Jamie breaking his power out of it's prison. I don't know how much control Jamie will have for and over the rest of his life, but it was truly awesome to watch him take control there and be large and in charge. And hopefully, his power vaporized that damn tracker in his body to useless molecular plasma.
Anonymous
11/25/25, 1:21 AM
Nooooo not this ending, fuck you Dauntless!

11/25/25, 2:49 AM
@Anonymous I'm pretty sure it's not the ending, just another truly evil cliffhanger.
11/25/25, 1:09 AM
A good, standard hypnosis story. The ending is closed for Casey and open for Jack. I'd like to see how a hypnosis story would be written if Jack accidentally found out what happened to Casey and that a hypnotherapist was involved. It would be interesting to see from his perspective how he could be hypnotized and enslaved!

11/25/25, 1:54 AM
@[Zander-1](/user/show/10015044) I did leave the door open… although, right now, there are no plans to do anymore with the story.
11/24/25, 11:16 PM
I love the start where Casey is in his car. The description of what he was wearing and his state of mind was both jarring and brilliantly executed. And I've followed Jack Parker across several sites and love that you gave recognition here. A sequel with Jack? Or Topper pimping out Casey in his beginning of this chapter mind frame?

11/25/25, 1:53 AM
@[Antnee](/user/show/10043490) I have no plans right now, but also you never know what the future holds. 🤔😉
Anonymous
11/24/25, 10:12 PM
P.S. besides mis-spells, there are missing words within the literacy of sentences. Check drafts better.

11/25/25, 1:52 AM
@Anonymous Sorry it disappointed you.